My DreamTo todays,i still remember that when i was young,our

My Dream To todays（建议直接用nowadays.todays是今夕的意思,为什么要加to,表目的?比较?相对?）,i （格式上：1.I 要大写；2.英文写作格式要求,每个逗号和句号后,要空一格.）still remember that when i was young,（建议此处用when I was a little boy/girl.因为对于外教而言,二十多岁的年纪就是young.）our teacher asked us to write a composition about our dreams.
At that time,i had a variety of unrealistic dreams.Just like draming（这里是想说dreaming of 朗文里没有draming这个词） of becoming millionaires（此处应该用a millionaire,因为你只是一个人,如何分身成很多个百万富翁呢?） overnight or suddenly juming （这里的原词是jumping吧?）to great fame.
With the growth of age,I think work is a blessing（句子成为不完整.“工作是一件有福分的”后面呢?或者把a去掉,变成work is blessing）,especially a well-paid job.Maybe you will ask me why your dream is so simple?Let me tell you my reason.One day,I will graduate from the university and enter （加定冠词 the）society.It means i have grown up.However,it also represents my parents are getting older and older.
They need to be taken good care of.So i want to work hard to get a well-paid job （逻辑问题.在顺序上,不是认真工作,然后找到一份高收入工作.而是,searching for a well-paid jod,然后找到一份高收入工作,再然后认真工作 拿到钱.）in order to （这里只用to表目的就够了,把 in order删掉.不能用in order to,因为这个只能放句首.这里是句中.） provide a better life for my parents.
I know that realizing this dream will take a lot of time and efforts.To achieve the dream,I will not just wait but take actions to live in my dream.