(20140113)一道高中英语书面表达题,盼您详细指点评改,谢谢!

书面表达

去年冬天的某些时候，中国大部分地区大雾笼罩，给人们的日常生活带来了不便。请以“heavy smog in china”为题写一篇120字左右的短文，简要陈述其原因及对应策略。

注意：可以适当增加细节以使行文连贯流畅。

heavy smog in china

at the end of 2013, a heavy smog came in cold winter and nearly 25 provinces were covered with the smog so that people’s regular life was disturbed.

obviously, smog comes from pollution. many factories produce too much smog but not cope with it, putting it out into the air directly. with the bad phenomenon happening again and again, the air becomes darker and darker ，the smog turns to be heavier and heavier.

so how to protect the environment in a harmonious way is presented to public. in a traditional way, we should ban those factories that make much pollution not to make great smog. faced with the heavy smog, we should use something that can cover our mouths. besides, we shouldn’t go outside frequently in order to breath in less smog or ash.

aiming at the heavy smog in china, we should protect our environment shoulder to shoulder in purpose of making a cozier world to live in!

书面表达

去年冬天的某些时候,中国大部分地区大雾笼罩,给人们的日常生活带来了不便.请以“Heavy smog in china”为题写一篇120字左右的短文,简要陈述其原因及对应策略.

注意：可以适当增加细节以使行文连贯流畅.

Heavy smog in china

At the end of 2013, a heavy smog came in cold winter and nearly 25 provinces were covered with the smog so that people’s regular life was disturbed.

The cause of smog is pollution. Many factories produce too much smog but don’t cope with it, putting it out into the air directly. With the bad phenomenon happening again and again, the air becomes darker and darker ,the smog turns to be heavier and heavier.

So the problem that how to protect the environment in a harmonious way is presented to public. In a traditional way, we should ban those factories that make much pollution not to make great smog. Facing with the heavy smog, we should use something that can cover our mouths. Besides, we shouldn’t go outside frequently to breath in less smog or ash.

Aiming at the heavy smog in china, we should protect our environment shoulder to shoulder in purpose of making a cozier world to live in!