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My name is xxx.I was born in Mar,l99x.From xxx to xxx I studied at xxxx School,and from xxx till now I'm at xxxx middle School.
I am a responsible,Friendly and warmhearted person.I have plenty of hobbies
,such as swimming,skating,playing football,and listening to music .I especially like listening to punk music,like sum 41 ,simple plan……These bands are great,
In recent years,many of my friends and classmates have been to study abroad.Of course some ones have chosen to study In the Canada.,I know that Canada is a beautiful country with so many beautiful sceneries from my friends and the Internet .It not only has good learning atmosphere but also owns an advanced education system and science.This makes me yearn to study in Canada.So I told my idea to my family.They quitely agree with that idea.They expected me to study more knowledge from abroad.I believe that I will not make them disappointed through my hard studying..Now I will entrust my friend to submit my application to the education department in Richmond,British Columbia.
If I can study in Canada,I will plan to major in natural science.I really like natural science since i was a child.I know that Canada's natural science is at a leading international status.In natural science,I prefer physics and psychology.Now I am drawing up a study plan.My plan is to complete my courses in senior high school in order to make further progress in my English to go to my ideal university to major in natural science
My parents have only one son,I hope I could repay them and my motherland thus when I finish my studies I will go back to my country.Here I want to share the reasons with you
Firstly,I am Chinese,It's China that support me and I shouldn't forget her favor
.Secondly,It's my duty.I should to come back to take care of my parents according to Chinese tradition..I believe that at that time China must have fully developed,which will provide with much bigger space for me to put my talent to good use.
Studying in Canada will help me to realize the life's leap.Thanks for taking your time to read my words.Kindly please consider my application and give a young ambitions man a chance to realize his dream.
Sincerely,
xxx
Date Aug 30,2010 From my friends and the Internet

I was borned in Mar,l99x
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我的名字叫XXX ，我出生在03月l99x 。从XXX至XXX我在xxxx学校学习，并从XXX至现在，我在xxxx很中等学校。
我是一个负责任的，友好和热情的人。我有很多爱好
，如游泳，溜冰，踢足球，听音乐。我特别喜欢听，如总和41，简单计划朋克音乐，乐队... ...这些都是伟大的，
近年来，许多朋友和我的同学去国外学习。当然有在加拿大学习。 ，从我...