00 As is humorously demonstrated in the pictures,with the ra

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00 As is humorously demonstrated in the pictures,with the rampancy of commercial fishing,
英语作文,帮我看看有没有语法错误和用词不当的,以及怎样修改,我对你的感激如同滔滔江水,绵绵不绝……
As is humorously demonstrated in the pictures,with the rampancy of commercial fishing,the number of fishes has dramatically shrunk.In the upper picture,there were various kinds of fishes and only one fishing-boat in 1990.On the contrary,in 1995 there was only one fish swimming freely but many fishing-boats sailing in sea.What is conveyed in the pictures is both realistic and most thought-provoking.
The implied meaning which is conveyed in the pictures can be briefly stated in the following three aspects.To begin with,all natural resources such as fish are limited.And some of them are not renewable.Thus,it is a must to make wise use of natural resources.What’s more,ecosystem should be protected in order to keep sustainable development.If we only care about the present,we will suffer punishment in the future.In addition,excessive exploitation of natural resources must be prohibited so as to protect our environment.Some people try their best to make as much money as possible without caring the social effect of their conducts.If we let this situation continue as it is,we do not know where the fish will be in years to come.By that time,our environment will suffer a great destruction.
To my way of thinking,counter-measures must be taken immediately so as to reverse the trend revealed in the pictures.On the one hand,we should bring home to people nothing is more important than to protecting our environment.On the other hand,laws must be established to severely punish those who misbehave and award those who behave well in terms of protecting our environment.Only in these ways can we build up a harmonious society.

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写得很好,以下个人意见
第一段第二句,fishes应用fish,这个词单复同形,there were 应用there are,因为说到Picture都是现在时
后面同理
第四句,in sea改为in the sea,习惯用法
第二段倒数第二局;in years to come,建议改为in the years to come,习惯用法
后面by that time用的不太好,因为前面没有提到任何时间点.建议直接改写整句为and our environment...
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