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其实 ‘on ’和 ‘about’ 都可以,在正式文体上用‘on’,口语中用‘about’.

hedgehog
[英][ˈhedʒhɒg][美][ˈhɛdʒˌhɔɡ,-ˌhɑɡ]
n.
刺猬,〈美〉豪猪；容易发怒的人,难对付的人；[军]刺猬弹；[植]野毛茛
复数:hedgehogs
双语例句
1.
A hedgehog rolls itself into a ball when attacked.
刺猬一受到攻击就蜷缩成一团.
2.
The hedgehog rolled itself up.
刺猬把身子蜷缩成一团.
3.
A frightened hedgehog contracts its body into a ball.
受惊的刺猬会把身体缩成一个球.
4.
A hedgehog's spines point backwards.
的刺毛是向后长的.
5.
The hedgehog curled up as I came near.
当我走近时,刺猬就卷起身子.

First,I was standing in the pool,the water submerged my feet,I feel a bit cold.
改成“First,I was standing in the pool.My feet was submerged by the water.I felt a bit cold."
Then,my mum dropped a lot of bath lotion into the pool,and foam was full of the pool.
改成"Then,my mum poured a lot of bath lotion into the pool,andteh pool was full of foam.
Next,she washed me with toothbrush.
改成"Next,she washed me with teethbrush."
Last,mum watered me till the foam on my body disappear.这句没有问题~

像一只刺猬,伤害了别人,也伤害了自己

翻译：
艾米,刺猬女孩
回到家来,艾米给妈妈讲学校的事情.“一位女士给我们做了一个关于野生动物的演讲,还给我们展示了一只刺猬.我要成为一个刺猬专家.”艾米说.妈妈让艾米上图书馆去找有关刺猬的书.然后艾米便去了.她不想见到派克先生,因为派克先生是个小气的吝啬鬼.艾米不喜欢他.图书馆有很多书.艾米沿着书架子走,希望能找到有关刺猬的书.“你在干嘛呢?”一个声音问道.“噢!是派克先生.我在找一本关于动物的书.”“什么动物?”派克先生问道.“刺猬.”艾米回答道.“刺猬!我不喜欢刺猬.我觉得它们又丑又懒.”派克先生说.然后帮艾米找到了刺猬的书.艾米很高兴地回家去了.读完书后,艾米发现刺猬吃蛞蝓和蜗牛.她了解到了刺猬的叫声.她便跑到花园里,学着刺猬的叫声.然后花园出现了一个声音.是只刺猬.艾米看到后非常开心.派克先生见到后,想到一个坏主意.他在艾米家门口钉了一张纸条,上边写着：给派克先生一英镑,就可以看到刺猬女孩啦!很快,许多人都给派克先生钱,来看刺猬女孩.艾米很不高兴.然后她想到了一个好主意.她爬上墙大喊：“今晚上大家付的钱全都会给刺猬医院.大家鼓掌.”人们都为派克先生鼓掌.可派克先生却很生气.故事到这里并没有结束.艾米为派克先生举行了一场比赛,蔬菜比赛.派克先生得到了第三名.他因此而很高兴,所以给刺猬买了些吃的.故事的最后,每个人都很开心.刺猬也很开心.
读后感：
Nothing Seek,Nothing Find
Recently,I read an interesting book called Amy the hedgehog girl.This book is about the little girl Amy wanted to be a hedgehog expert.She went to the library to borrow a book and a tape.And Amy learned to talk with the hedgehog.Amy found hedgehogs in Mr.Peck’s garden.But Mr.Peck wanted to make some money from visitors.Amy told to everybody that the money was used to build a hedgehog hospital.So she fixed Mr.Peck’s plan.Mr.Peck finally had to build a hedgehogs hospital.
I think that Amy was clever and ordinary.However,she had a very special dream.She promised she could be a hedgehog expert.She didn’t give up and constantly explore.So she finally succeeded.
From this story,I have learnt a lot.If we want to succeed,we must first have a dream.Then we should unremitting efforts and never give up.Finally,we must constantly practise,because ‘practice makes perfect’.In a word,‘nothing seek,nothing find’.I'll put this truth in my mind forever.

use sth.to do sth.protect前面加to
两个me都 改成myself 更为妥当
而且前两个分居应当合并在一起,不用拆开