求...谁帮我改下或润色下这几句“诗”谢谢了

Good morning teachers.I'm very glad to stand here to give you a short speech.Now please let me introduce myself first.My name is Lily.I'm a student in Grade 8 at ^^^school.I am a girl who loves dreaming.I've had many colorful dreams in my childhood.When I am not busy,I usually watch movies,Alice's Adventure in Wonderland and Harry Potter are my favourate.Harry and Alice are both brave and clever.And I hope I can be as brave as they are someday.I often dream to have an adventure with Alice and Harry Potter.It's very interesting and fantastic.

I didn't expect myself to be interested in the real estate field,which seems to me quite far-fetched.It was no news,therefore,that I had no idea what the host and guests were talking about presenting all the diagrams and tables with statistics on a talk show on TV.My only reaction was staring ahead of me with a confused expression.The detailed analysis and patient explanations seem but a wasted music chapter played for the bull.By and by,however,I felt myself drawn into the atmosphere of the heated discussions and proactive questions from the audience.I started to feel that maybe,even in this area,there is something in there for me.Yes,I could be a complete layman by now,but I am confident to have some say with due studies.I can make it my way!

In a common family,father often plays an important role and makes a deep influence on his children.My father is no exceptance.He is a navy official who has been in the army for more than 20 years.As a father,he is mighty,handsome,humorous and unyielding who is like a mountain casts his shadow in my heart.This kind of effect will even accompany with me for good.
To pursue his ambition and realize his own value that making a contribution to the motherland,leaving the home,the affectionate parents and confidants,my father decided to start his new in the army at the age of 17 and succeeded in enrolling the military academy.Likewise,in my mind is there a big world.It is me,who was also 17,independent,unswerving,and eager to contribute my share to this world.As I grow up,I made up my mind to further my study on my own in U.S.A ,which is more open and has more chances.Even though this way is long and full of difficulties,I won’t give up,with my steadfast pace.

This part of the work mainly consists of two parts, the first part is a research on genes which have been confirmed to be related to A, by searching the previous literature, we find D genes related to A.
By Analogizing with our work, we list it, see the following table.
The second part is how the A proteome works.There have been some researches about proteomics,we find them to do a comparison.
The total number is D, the number of genes that have similar expression patterns of ours is D,which account for how much of the total number.
From the perious researches we can find out that D% of the genes which have been comfirmed to be related to A or participate in A process in other related species have appeared an increasing expression,which is a small part of the total amout.
It draw a conclusion that these genes all participate in the A process more or less,which has a reference value for future studies.
Although there are differences between protein expression level and gene expression level,we can still find some interesting subjects,such as the number is higher when its expression level is the same as gene expression level.
后半段过于专业,例如“在a或者其他相关物种中参与a过程的基因”,“基因表达”“上升表达”等等,由于不知道专业术语和专业表达方法,基本都是按字面翻译,因此必定有错漏之处,请加以改正.
手工翻译,望采纳：）

It looks good in my notebook but the color is lost when it is saved as HTML format.The same happens with some other functions such as column.
I've tried a number of methods to solve the problem and I found a solution which can partly solve the problem is to use item to set the background colour.However,the item size is not working properly when it is saved as HTML format.
Now I can select the words in the color frame,but the item size is too tightly aligned and other options such as spacing do not work properly when it is saved as HTML format.

In recent years, more and more international students come to Australia TO SEEK higher education. However, there are many challenges FOR THOSE STUDENTS especially TO ADJUST to a new academic culture. This essay will talk about three main DIFFERENT AREAS FROM style, assessment system TO educational background then some advice to help those students overcome the difficulties.
One of the main problems for international student is about the thinking style. THAT a Japanese student who studied well in Tokyo but failed in his essay in Australia can be taken as a good example. The teacher wanted students to compare and analyseS the similarities and differences between two person’s views. Unfortunately, although the Japanese student introduced lots of details about their background and personal life, his summary was so brief that there WAs no comment in his essay. (Ballard & Clanchy 1984). It is clear that the Japanese student still insisted IN writing IN his old thinking style. Therefore, the essay without critical thinking was not acceptable. According to his situation, some methods should be taken to solve this problem. Firstly, the international students should make an effort to adjust to the new academic culture. Secondly, students have to change their thinking style to consider more about new situation and new culture style. Finally, seeking help from teachers is the most significant way to get higher scores and overcome the problems.
The different assessment system can cause a lot of problems for international students. Assessment grades is a good example; the assessment grades here include 4 levels; Pass, Credit, Distinction and High Distinction. Many international students feel disappointed about their first mark, because they were usually get high marks before but only got pass here. So the system of mark in Australia is so tough that some American students were shocked by the marks for their first essay. (White 2003) In addition, some students found it is hard to write their essay. They cannot just follow their teachers’ ideas and must always give references to avoid plagiarism. It is a hard job for some students and if they ignore the importance of reference they will not get a high mark. Now it is clear that nobody can adapt to a new environment perfectly. So asking teachers for help will be the best way to solve the problem and can lead international students into a right way to adapt to the new assessment system. Besides, make sure that you know the requirements about your essays or exams clearly, WHICH can avoid many unnecessary problems.(THIS EXPRESSION IS NOT CLEAR ENOUGH)
Different educational background is another challenge for international students. A student from Sri Lanka told Her experience. According to Ponniahpillai (2000) in her country students have a lot of respect for their teachers and they always keep distance from their teachers. The teachers will call a student if they find some of them have problems. So their learning experience do not encourage them to ask QUESTIONS and most of them never DO IT although they do not understand. This academic habit is not acceptable in Australia for the aim of education here is to develop independent learning skills. So one of the most efficient methods to avoid problems is use library. They search for useful information which will lead international students to be independent. Another way is ‘if in doubt ask’(Ponniahpillai 2000), teachers in Australia talk with students friendly, so do not feel shy BUT talk with them SO THAT the problems can be solved quickly.
In conclusion, it is clear that if international students want to succeed here they must change their thinking style as soon as possible and make sure they know the new assessment system. Moreover, forget their old educational background and enjoy this new academic culture. In addition, remember TO ask for help from the teachers or friends when in doubt and it can help international students solve the difficulties quickly. There will be a promising future for the international students if they can overcome those challenges and difficulties.
不是education background,是study pattern而已拉.

笨笨,遇到问题就网上问~算了,给你写几个~
筷子的神力
思考：把一根筷子插入装着米的杯子中,然后将筷子上提,筷子会把米和杯子提
起吗?
材料：塑料杯一个、米一杯、竹筷子一根
操作：
1、将米倒满塑料杯.
2、用手将杯子里的米按一按.
3、用手按住米,从手指缝间插入筷子.
4、用手轻轻提起筷子,杯子和米一起被提起来了.
讲
由于杯内米粒之间的挤压,使杯内的空气被挤出来,杯子外面的压力大于杯内的
压力,使筷子和米粒之间紧紧地结合在一起,所以筷子就能将成米的杯子提起来.
瓶子赛跑
思考：装有沙子和装有水的两个同等重量的瓶子从一个高度滚下来,谁先到达终
点?
材料：同等大小、重量相等的瓶子两个、沙子、水、长方形木板一块、两本厚书
操作：
1、用长方形木板和两本书达成一个斜坡
2、将水倒入另一个瓶子中,将沙子倒入瓶子中
3、把两只瓶子放在木板上,在同一起始高度让两只瓶子同时向下滚动
4、装水的瓶子比装沙子的瓶子提前到达终点
讲
沙子对瓶子内壁的摩擦比水对瓶子内壁的摩擦要大得多,而且沙子之间还会有摩
擦,因此它的下滑速度比装水的瓶子要慢.
创造：将瓶子里的物质换一换,再让它们比比赛吧!
带电的报纸
思考：不用胶水、胶布等粘合的东西,报纸就能贴在墙上掉不下来.你知道这是
为什么吗?
材料：1支铅笔；1张报纸.
步骤：
1. 展开报纸,把报纸平铺在墙上.
2. 用铅笔的侧面迅速地在报纸上摩擦几下后,报纸就像粘在墙上一样掉不下来
了.
3. 掀起报纸的一角,然后松手,被掀起的角会被墙壁吸回去.
4. 把报纸慢慢地从墙上揭下来,注意倾听静电的声音.
说明：
1. 摩擦铅笔,使报纸带电.
2. 带电的报纸被吸到了墙.
3. 当屋子里的空气干燥（尤其是在冬天）,如果你把报纸从墙上揭下来,就会
听到静电的劈啪声.
创造：请试一试,还有什么物品能不用粘和剂,而用静电粘在墙上
胡椒粉与盐巴的分离
思考：不小心将厨房的佐料：胡椒粉与盐巴混在了一起,用什么方法将他们分离
开呢?
材料：胡椒粉、盐巴、塑料汤勺、小盘子
操作：
1、将盐巴与胡椒粉相混在一起.
2、用筷子搅拌均匀.
3、塑料汤勺在衣服上摩擦后放在盐巴与胡椒粉的上方.
4、胡椒粉先粘附在汤勺上.
5、将塑料汤勺稍微向下移动一下.
6、盐巴后粘附在汤勺上.
讲
胡椒粉比盐巴早被静电吸附的原因,是因为它的重量比盐巴轻.
创造：
你能用这种方法将其他混合的原料分离吗?
带电的气球
思考：两个气球什么情况下会相互吸引, 什么情况下会相互排斥?
材料：打好气的气球2个、线绳1根、硬纸板1张
操作：
1 将两个气球分别充气并在口上打结.
2 用线将两个气球连接起来.
3 用气球在头发（或者羊毛衫）上摩擦.
4 提起线绳的中间部位,两个气球立刻分开了.
5 将硬纸板放在两个气球之间,气球上的电使它们被吸引到纸板上.
讲
1 一个气球上的电排斥另一个气球上的电.
2 两个气球上的电使它们被吸引到纸板上.
创造：你能用其它小实验说明气球带电吗?
可爱的浮水印
思考：宣纸上漂亮的图案不是画出来的,是怎样制作出来的?
材料：脸盆1个、宣纸1-2张、筷子1支、棉花棒1根、墨汁1瓶、水（约半盆）
操作：
1、在脸盆里倒入半盆水,用蘸了墨汁的筷子轻轻碰触水面,即可看到墨汁在水
面上扩展成一个圆形.
2、拿棉花棒在头皮上摩擦二、三下.
3、然后轻碰墨汁圆形图案的圆心处,看看有什么现象.
4、把书法用纸轻轻覆盖在水面上,然后缓缓拿起,纸上印出什么图案呢?
讲
1、棉花棒碰触时,墨汁会被扩展成一个不规则的圆圈图形.
2、棉花棒在头皮上摩擦所涂上的少量油,就会影响水分子互相拉引的力量.
3、水印会呈现不规则的同心圆图形.
创造：
试试其他的方法,改变水面上墨汁的图形.
分合的水流
思考：多股的水流用手一抹,竟变成一股水流这是为什么呢?
材料：铁罐盒一个、锥子、水
操作：
1、在空的铁罐盒底部用一根钉子在上面钻5个小孔（小孔间隔只在5毫米左
右）.
2、将罐内盛满水,水是分成5股从5个小孔中流出的.
3、用大拇指和食指将这些水流捻合在一起.
4、手拿开后,5股水就会合成一股.
5、如果你用手再擦一下罐上的小孔,水就又会重新变成5股.
讲
水的表面张力使水流进行分、合.
漂浮的针
思考：针为什么会浮在水面上?
材料：一碗水、针、叉子、液体清洁剂
操作：
1、在杯子里倒一杯清水
2、用一个叉子,小心地把一根针放到水的表面
2、慢慢地移出叉子,针将会浮在水面上
3、向水里滴一滴清洁剂,针就沉下去了
讲
1、是水的表面张力支撑住了针,使之不会沉下.表面张力是水分子形成的内聚
性的连接.这种内聚性的连接是由于某一部分的分子被吸引到一起,分子间相互挤压,
形成一层薄膜.这层薄膜被称做表面张力,它可以托住原本应该沉下的物体.
2、清洁剂降低了表面张力,针就浮不住了.
说明：针有危险,请家长帮助操作.
神奇的牙签
思考：放在水里的牙签,会随着放在水里的方糖游动,还是随着放在水里的肥皂
游动?
材料：牙签、一盆清水、肥皂、方糖
操作：
1. 把牙签小心地放在水面上.
2. 把方糖放入水盆中离牙签较远的地方.牙签会向方糖方向移动.
3. 换一盆水,把牙签小心地放在水面上,现在把肥皂放入水盆中离牙签较近的
地方.牙签会远离肥皂.
讲
当你把方糖放入水盆的中心时,方糖会吸收一些水分,所以会有很小的水流往方
糖的方向流,而牙签也跟着水流移动.但是,当你把肥皂投入水盆中时,水盆边的表面
张力比较强,所以会把牙签向外拉.
创造：请你试一试,如果将糖和肥皂换成其它物质,牙签会向哪个方向游去
有孔纸片托水
思考：有孔的纸为什么能拖住水?
材料：瓶子一个、大头针一个、纸片一张,有色水一满杯
操作：
1、在空瓶内盛满有色水.
2、用大头针在白纸上扎许多孔.
3、把有孔纸片盖住瓶口.
4、用手压着纸片,将瓶倒转,使瓶口朝下.
5、将手轻轻移开,纸片纹丝不动地盖住瓶口,而且水也未从孔中流出来.
讲
薄纸片能托起瓶中的水,是因为大气压强作用于纸片上,产生了向上的托力.小
孔不会漏出水来,是因为水有表面张力,水在纸的表面形成水的薄膜,使水不会漏出
来.这如同布做的雨伞,布虽然有很多小孔,仍然不会漏雨一样.
手绢的秘密
思考：在水龙头下把手帕撑开摊平,打开水龙头,水是不是透过手帕而流下去呢
?
材料：玻璃杯1个、手帕1条、橡皮筋1条
流程：
1、 把手帕盖住杯口,用橡皮筋绑紧.
2、 让水冲在手帕上.
3、 水流进杯子里约七、八分满后关闭水龙头.
4、 杯口朝下,把杯子迅速倒转过来.
说明：
1、 从杯子上面冲水时,水会透过手帕流入杯内.
2、 杯子倒转过来时,由于大气压力的关系,水不会流出来.
延伸：
如果盖住杯口手帕的布料不同（例如棉布或是毛巾、麻布）,水的进出情形会怎
样呢?
掉不下去的塑料垫板
思考：盛水的杯子上覆盖垫板,杯口朝下时,垫板会掉下来吗?
材料：玻璃杯两个、水、塑料板一块
操作：
1. 将玻璃杯里装满水.
2. 用垫板盖好杯口.
3. 一只手扶杯子、另一只手按住垫板.
4. 用手扶住,将杯口翻转过来,使杯口朝下.
5. 扶着垫板的手轻轻放开,垫板不会掉下来.
讲
垫板覆盖在盛水的杯子口上,因为杯外空气压力比较大,垫板就不会掉下来.
创造：
如果杯子里的水不满、或没有水塑料板会怎样,请你试一试?

那个学分应该翻译成credit而不是study-point,你说study-point人家怎么可能看懂?
把那个so I didn't turn to disturb your life去掉.然后后面改成Later on I found out that Entlish is a 3-credit course, and that I won't be able to get my bachelor's degree if I fail it.
另外,其实语法之类的不重要,重要的是你得言之有理.如果the Public English Education Offce没收到你的self-study hall的分数,因此不能给你改成绩,那外教凭什么要给你改成绩?你得拿出令人信服的理由来.反正我从你的信里没看出来.你因为这门课不能毕业并不是外教帮你改成绩的理由.你需要让他明白的是你这门课本就该拿到分,没拿到分数不是你的责任,你得解释解释为什么你没拿到那个self-study hall的成绩.
还有你也不用急着招认你缺了2、3次课,这不会是你不及格的理由.你finished所有的journal还有enjoyed什么什么节日还有你还留着他给你的巧克力,也不是你pass这门课的理由,你得说明你的成绩合格才可以.
再另外,如果仅仅因为这一门英语课导致你不能毕业,那是非常荒谬的事.即使你是英语专业的学生,也不该这样.如果是我的话,我会投诉学校.

1编审特别提到,这篇文章需要进一步润色.（editor,polish)
The editor especially mentioned that this article need to be polished further.
2他的家人对他的职业选择感到高兴.（delighted,profession)
His family are delighted at his choice of profession.

注：括弧内()的文字就是我润色的部分.我是一段一段的润色哦.
First,young students go abroad to study can open their eyes.because,young students are more like to absorb the new concept and new idea,and those are a little different from our country's.so it is a great chance for them to learn the culture of other country,which can open their eyes.
1.(Studying abroad definitely broadens your horizons.To most people,it is an enriching and eye-opening adventure.You will gain in-depth knowledge of another culture's customs,experience local culture and in the mean time improve your foreign language skills.)
Second ,to study abroad can help two country's communication.communication is a very important way for our human to solve the conflict between us,and to promote the friendship between us.learning English can help us to communicate with english-speaking country,similarly,learning other country's culture can help us to communicate with their people,furthermore,the communication between two countrys can be achieved only by the people of both country.
2.(Besides,a firsthand understanding of a foreign culture helps paving the way for mutual understanding and communication.Bonds of friendship among nations and the people can be created through the exchange of ideas and sharing of experience.)
Third,we can learn the advantage of other country.in some fields,our country's technology is not the best,that is the reason why we should learn from other,the students can go to those country and learn this hi-tech which is our country lack of,after their finishing study,they can return and serve our country.
3.(Last but not least,developing countries can be eventually technologically capable by participating in educational programs for technology transfer.Under such programs,students who go abroad to study are front-line pioneers to acquire advanced skills,knowledge,technologies,methods of manufacturing and facilities in their area of study.These students will be contributing their insight,expertise,knowledge and skills to the country of origin upon their return home.）
这个是我觉得你可以在第三段中加上的一个例子：
For example,some Indian graduates acquired valuable and transferable skills when their worked in Silicon Valley firms in the United States and went back to start their own firms bringing employment to the local people.)
PS:young students go abroad to study can open their eyes这句话是否正确,应该用going 还是go
Go正确,不过我会选择用一下这个句子来表达“学生出国留学以便增加见识”的意思：-
Students go abroad to study so that they can widen their horizons.
Students choose to study abroad because they want to widen their horizons.

In today's increasingly competitive, internal communication has an increasingly important strategic significance. Enterprise between people, between departments effective communication and exchange, is conducive to the formation of corporate culture is conducive to the cooperation between the functions of writing, is conducive to enhancing mutual trust among the staff, to form a unified values and a strong cohesion, help meet the psychological needs of employees, employee participation in enterprise management to mobilize the enthusiasm and creativity, will help improve the competitiveness of enterprises and economic benefits.
Ubiquitous communication, communication is a two-way interaction. Enterprises to improve internal communication. First, through modern enterprise culture, tape registration system, and establish full communication of ideas, and secondly, to establish effective communication channels for interactive two-way communication and information feedback, so that the internal communication channels open.

希望能帮到你~~

once my english was not so good,but I made a progress through hardly work in my college.

总体定的还行,错误不多,不过有些词用的不准确.改了几个句子上的问题.
In 21 century,there is an increasing number of people who use computer,television and mobile phone.
It is known to all that violence plays...
Some youngster prefer to imitate someone who is awesome from the television program.
In addition,the more time they spend on the film,the less exercise they can do.
Although后面的逗号去掉,we had better ge intimate with nature.

The Chinese New Year is the most important festival for the Chinese people.It is also called the Spring Festival or the Lunar New Year.The Chinese people light fireworks and firecrackers and dress themselves in red.Do you know why?
旁白：Long long ago,there was a monster called NIAN,who was an enormous,ferocious,violent,single-horned wild beast with sharp teeth and a long,powerful tail.It lived in the mountain in peace time.Every New Year's eve,it came down to feast on people and their harvests.
年：I am hungry!I want to eat something!Wow,a village out there!There must be people around there,and I can eat them.I am hungry!
村民1：It's NIAN!NIAN is coming to eat us!Help!
旁白：Many years later,with hundreds of people dead,people finally found a way to drive the monster away.
村民2：NIAN is afraid of red,blowout and fire.Let's dress in red light bamboos.
村民1：And we can put some red paper on the door!
旁白：When NIAN came to the village,it saw the fire and the red things.It was afraid and couldn't prey on villagers any more.
村民2：Let's begin splitting bamboos and making sure that the “pa pa” sound can be clearly heard.
村民1：Yeah!Look!NIAN is running off quickly on hearing the sound!
村民合：We are winning!Yeah!
旁白：After this,Nian never turned up again.But this custom continues,till today.Now,people still dress in red and light fireworks.
Each Chinese year has a name of an animal,including those of the rat,the ox,the tiger,the rabbit,the dragon,the snake,the horse,the ram,the monkey,the rooster,the dog and the pig.A Chinese legend says that these twelve animals once had a race.The first year was named after the rat,the winner.The other eleven years were named after the order in which the animals arrived at the finishing line.The clever rat jumped onto the ox’s back and in the end jumped over the ox’s head to arrive first!2010 is the year of the tiger.The tiger is a kind of fierce beast.It symbolizes power,energy and bravery.

I (had been resting) for a week.Even (though) I felt good and free.I began to feel bored.I had a lot of time to do the things I (liked) .But most of the time I was alone.
Luckily,The Spring Festival (came).This (was) a family reunion day .I was very happy to see many relatives and friends.Adults were all very busy for the Spring Festival and so was I.But the thing that I (expected) most was the older generation (making) red paper containing money as a gift for me !

1.student's-----students'
2.want do-----want to do
3.you growing-----you are growing up
4.think it's unfair-----think it unfair
5."But"去掉,最后两句应该是一句话
6.第二个“these poor student”可改为they避免重复
7.逻辑上讲,（1）应该是先study hard,不然和你的第一句话无关了；
（2） finally的层次跟前面好像不太一样,改成放在句中可能会更好一点,当然老师应该不会看这么仔细

With the development of the times （随着时代的发展应该是With the development of time,）,chatting online has become an indispensable part of our daily life,especially with （这里介词应用for）college students.As one of my most meaningful experiences,chatting online has brought a lot of benefits to my life.For one thing,it provides us a convenient and efficient method to contact our friends,let us even thousands of miles away can also keep in touch（改为and we can easily keep in touch no matter how great the distance between us）.Unlike the telephone,we have to have a mobile phone each other can we have a talk（改为we can only start a conversation by holding a moblephone in hand） ,and the worst thing is that we can only talk with one person each time.Chatting online can offer me much opportunity(more oppotunities ) to talk with several friends at the same time.For another reason,chatting online can help us make friends from the entire world as many as we can.Also,(改成in the meantime) it can save our time and money and practice our comminuting skill.（改成time and money is necessarily saved and we can practice our comminuting skill in the process.）
Though (通过吧?through)chatting online,I have more chances to make new friends who can help me and （+we can ）exchange our ideas and learn more from each other.And the most critical result of chatting online is that we can share our mood with our friends at any time,any place without the worry about the embarrassment which may happen in face to face talk.(in a face-to-face talk)
Now I tend to chat online in English,which can promote our(改成my,不然和前面的I不搭) spoken English.In short,there is not anything in my life that is more beneficial than chatting online if we（I） can arrange the reasonable time on the network.
楼主写的很好,我只是稍加润色

是要把结构改为一致吗?
A脚下是碧绿的草地
B溪边开满了五彩的花朵

我本属沉默之人,是非对错、歪斜曲直都懒得去与他人争论.隔离喧嚣、求静获稳以像潺潺溪水一样流淌为理想,度人生之岁月.

Good morning, everyone!
I just couldn't be merrier to show up here and have such an honor to introduce myself to you.
My name is Liu, Zhaoyang, and I'm 12 years old. To be honest, I'm kind of ...

没错,一定要考虑场合和对象.楼主说得对,也是我一贯坚持的.=）
个别地方有调整,因为不适应西方人的习惯,比如对长者应当先有问候再说事儿.修改在里,补充在（）里,楼主自己是否需要.
Dear Mr.XX,
亲爱的XX先生：
First,happy new year to you!( I hope everything goes on well with you.)
（首先,祝您）新年快乐!(希望您一切都好.)
Well,does the work goes on smoothly?
不知道事情进展的还顺利吗?
I have already translated the poems for blind children.i hope it was finished in time,and can offer some help to your writing work.
我已经把盲童读的诗歌翻译好了.(“不知道是否及时” 改成 “希望完成得及时”）希望对您的写作有所帮助.
Looking forward to your answer.
期待您的回音.
Best wishes with regards,
祝好!(直译过来是“充满敬意的最好的祝愿.”另外,一般不说“best regards”,习惯搭配是best wishes.)
某某,x日-x月-x年
---gelumi~XD 有点多,但是我觉得加入说明很必要

很急么?晚上再回复给你可以么? 我的邮箱是 emilytin@hotmail.co.uk

说说你喜欢的运动或者是你的生活习惯,日常爱好
也可以说说你的一些小缺点,请大家多多包涵之类的
至于楼下说的一点小错误 如果是演讲的话 单词写错了不要紧 会念就好

Now,we can say that electrical energy is the most important thing in the community.We use it to cook and light.Our lives are almost inseparable from electrical energy.The energy used in our daily life mainly comes from other forms of energy’s conversion,such as hydroenergy,solar energy,wind energy,tidal energy,geothermal energy,and so on.
Solar energy is a clean,and renewable energy.The working principle of solar power is to use the convergence of the sun to boil the water until it changes into steam.In this way,we can generate electricity.
The water energy which the hydropower uses mainly is the potential energy hidden in the water.In order to change the hydroenergy into electrical energy,we need to build different types of hydropower station.When the river flows from a high place ,the potential energy changes into kinetic energy.Then the turbine use the kinetic energy as the driving force to promote the generator to produce electricity.In China we have the world-famous Three Gorges Hydropower Station.It works like this
Imagine life without electricity,not just a brief power outage.We all know how inconvenient life becomes when our electricity is out for only a few hours.How hard it is to remember for that short period of time that the light switch will not produce instant light,the hair dryer will not immediately blow dry our hair,or that we can't even run water into our homes.Our homes and lives have become so dependent on electricity it is really hard to imagine everything that would change without it.
Lifestyles will become very Inconvenient.

你一点财富的鼓励都没有,谁那么无聊跟你改作文.

It has been four month since I joined BBIT and it's absolutely an rewarding experience for me and I feel lucky and happy to work with all of you,my lovely colleagues.
During the four months,I 've learned a lot,I knew the skill of windows server and citrix,the details of each customer.I particited in ITIL training ,Azure pacl and rhce and learn how they works.Moreover,I can sucessfully enter the OC to complete my work .And the most exciting is that I have been getting well with my colleagues and I enjoy working with them.
Hope to make persistent improvement in the future.

（届时）,（会同）新闻部门联系报道的（事宜）.

鲁滨逊是笛福创造出来的一个传奇人物.在小说里,笛福描述了鲁滨逊从天真,朴素的青年成长为一个成熟,坚韧的人,他在原本平静的生活里经受了大量的考验.最终,他以自己顽强的毅力和坚强的意志在孤岛上生活了二十八年之久,...

Unless any exception is noted,line numbers and page numbers (used to mark the position (where correction is needed)) refer to the position in the revised edition.
需要一个复合从句才能表达清楚这个意思.另外 “特殊说明”我认为用exception比otherwise合适.

Merry Christmas everyone.Santa Clause is finally coming around the corner.Glad you could join us for the one and only Christmas Special show.This is our first show.(applause) yea!Thank you very much for your support.
Let me introduce you to our newest members ABCD of the English broadcasting station.We'll be with you every Thursday afternoon from xx to xx.Hope you can tune in and join us for the hours of fun and laughter packed show.Now let's play a lovely tune by xxxx,followed by some important news that you do not want to miss.Don't go away,we'll be right back.

stay in awake, no fair, no fury, never give up, fight with self-weakness, strive for myself.
（Inner piece, buddy）

Maybe that beggar is a real cheat,but one who gives would only lose a Nickle.
Yet if Otherwise,that one might lose the LIFE.
Then which one is more important?
Good Language is For Good,and For God.
I admire your GOOD English,really; and you being the master.
GOOD LUCK

数目较上一个时期,分别下降了3%和16%,从此我们可以发现有一个明显的下降在总量上,这也反映了@的发育其实一个@过程.
为了更好的分析数据,我们把差异基因分成了其余俩个类别：相差10倍的和相差15倍的.
通过此我们可以看出,差异是很明显的,
The number,compared to that of last period, has decreased by 3% and 16% seperately.So we could find an obvious decline in the total quantity,which also shows us a @ process in the @ growth.
In orde to have a good analysis on the data,we seperated the different genes into two other groups according to the differences about 10 times and 15 times.And we could draw a conclusion that the difference is exactly obvious.
在10倍差异仍有很多基因,无论是那个时期对比,下降仍是主要趋势,说明变化很大,也能发生了说明@过程值得我们继续深入研究
There're still many genes within the difference of 10 times.The main trend is to decrease whatever period it is compared with,which means that the great change could happen.And the process of @ is worth further and deep study for us.
众所周知,@数据库分为俩种.我们的工作比对的是其中一个数据库.通过比对另一个数据库,可以获得更多的生物信息学分析,
我们以80%为阈值,对@进行整合.可以完善了我们的@分析,也为下面的软件分析奠定基础,对比的结果列表如下
It' known to all that the datebase has two kinds,one of which is the object for us to work with and compare.We could get more information of bioinformatics analysis by comparing it with anther.
We combine @ by the threshold of 80 percent ,which could also complete our analysis about @ and lay the foundation for the next software analysis.The result of comparison is as follows:
通过数据库整合,我们多获得了@个数据,例如
同时,我们也能整合以前别人的工作.
我们基于水稻物种俩个都测序了,分析数据量较少,可以与粳稻整合,整合出来的数据
可以多的分析.我们认为这对于今后分析是分析的好办法和趋势.
By combining the database,we have gotten more data for @,for example
At the same time,we can also combine and get more information from the work done by others.
We have both checked up the gene sequence on the basis of the rice specie.For the little data,it could be integrated with Japonica rice,which will produce more data for us to analyse.We think it a good way and trend to study the same subject in the future.
纯手工翻译,仅供参考,如有不解,欢迎来函（Hi）

你应该有能力再在感恩的地方多写点的吧 估计这样子会更好

Calamity brings out one’s best characters
Just as the sweet-smelling,which is of the plum blossom,is from the coldest winder training ,the calamity is contributing to an important extent to the development of one’s characters .It's said that two views about calamity are in our society.Some people consider it a beneficial for one’s bring-up,but some think it not.Why (这里加点儿什么,感觉到这里突然断掉了.应该稍微剖析一下原因.）
In my opinion ,calamity is a challenge for our limited ability .it is a positive way to improve our society capability ,and will temper one’s best characters .
It is impossible for everyone meeting no calamity all their life .if we are not about to face various calamity during your life ,we may lose some important chances.举例的部分改一下,例子不是很好.what is more ,calamity is playing a vital role to enhance one’s quality.Firstly ,it teaches us how to solve problem .secondly ,it tells us what to cherish happiness.At last ,it give our some pressure help ourselves to be/get stronger and stronger .
Last but no least ,everyone know the coin has two sides.If we want to succeed,we must overcome calamity's inactive aspect.

Dear Sir,
The Mar.bill of customer A is attached please notice to check.The transport cost with invoice No.C is RMB B and other costs with invoice No.D are RMB C.

1.润色的脸庞
2.妈妈在电话里说：“宁宁,妈妈要加班,你先自己吃饭吧!”
间接转述：
妈妈在电话里给宁宁说,她要加班,叫宁宁自己吃饭.
间接转述与转述句基本上是一个意思.

Hello everyone.(since this is an self introduction,you'd better first provide some information about yourself)
This is my best friend HJH.This my best friend HX.(you can't have two best "friend".you can say "this is ...,and this is .they are two of my best friends")
Three years ago,we met in the same class （in this class).Today we still get togetheer.( are together)
HJH is very friendly.She often helps me.If (when)I get into trouble
she often gives me a hand.When I feel sad.(,)I often chat with her.She often makes me happy.
HX is very helpful.She often helps me to (不要to) learn English.She is the best listener 听我诉说快乐与悲伤.(of my happiness and sorrow).
We all like pop music.Lee Hom is HS`s favourite singer (HS is a fervent fan of Lee Hom).RAIN is HJH`s favourite star.If we are free ,we will go shopping or go skiting
与你再一起让我感到很充实 (to be with you alone makes me content)
I must 珍惜(cherish) our friendship.
I think we will have more friends in class nine.
写得不错,加油!

今天,我要向大家所讲述的是曾经发生在我和父亲之间的故事,记忆回溯,几年前,在那一次旅行中,坐在列车上的我显得尤其兴奋,可突然间,列车顶部的一块钢板直冲着我的后背砸去,然而就在此瞬间,我身旁的父亲用他粗壮而有力的胳膊挡住了正在下落的钢板,此后,父亲的手臂上出现了两条长长的伤痕,我看着那血淋淋的场面,我呆住了.瞬间体会到父亲（ 不顾一切 ）的爱,我会永远感激并（敬爱 ）我的父亲

润色如下：
My passion for pharmaceutical research has much to do with one of my female apprentices.She used to major in biological science,but after she went abroad to America,she began to pursue PhD in pharmaceutical science.I learned a lot about pharmaceutical research from her such as drug efficacy,drug safety and drug design,etc.And I found pharmaceutical research attracts me much more than my recent research,because unlike my research about microorganism,it is human oriented and people can benefit from our research directly.It is due to this coincedence that I have come to know my real interest.

My favorite movie is Everybody’s fine.It told us a story about a father travelled between different cities in the USA to see his children.The old man lived in the countryside and his children lived in different cities.His wife has gone,so he missed his children very much.Every weekend he called his children to come home for family reunion,and they all agreed.So the old man cooked the dinner very carefully every time.But every weekend,his children stood him up in the last minute.At last,he had to dine alone and lonely.
Finally,one day,he decided,although all of his children didn’t show up for a visit,he would go to visit them.He packed his bag and started the journey.
First,he went to the youngest son’s home,his name is David.He waited in front of the door for a long time but his son didn’t show up.So he left a letter and went on to meet his other children.On the way away from David’s,he found some pictures drawn by hiim.He was happy and he thought David has become an artist.
Then the old father went to meet other children.They were in different cities,they had different work and they also had their own happiness and unhappiness.
When the old father asked his children:Are you happy?Their answers are surprisingly identical:they were very fine and very happy.
But the old father discovered something not very good:
Amy told the old father that Jack was a good student in the school but he found that it was not true.However,at the airport,Amy said that she was happy.And the old father said ‘A happy one.First one on my list.’
Robert told his father that he was a conductor in an orchestra,but the old father found Robert was just a drummer.The old father was not very happy but Robert also said that he was fine enough Anyway,the old father was happy because Robert was fine,too.
Then,the old father went to see his daughter Rosie.He noticed that Rosie rent a very impressive（房子基本不用impressive来形容,如果想表达贵的话用expensive,奢华的话用luxurious） apartment and became a single mother.
About everything that the old father found and thought,the children told a lot of lies to deceive him.The old father was not very happy.
So,the old man wanted to go home.But on his way home,his heart disease attacked all at once.
After hearing the bad news,Frank’s children went to the hospital as fast as they can.When frank was saved from death,he saw his children around him except David.Then,he knew David has been in the heaven.He accepted the fact.
At the end of the film,Frank was having Christmas dinner with Rosie,Robert and Amy.Frank said:Everybody’s fine.
I love this movie.It didn’t have any special spectacle,but it also moved us a lot,because it showed a lot of love among family.
纯手写.求加分.

Keeping pets may be significant to somebody,especially to senior citizens who live alone or to the people with psychological problems.

My Family
I have a warm family.There are three people in my family.They are my father,my mother and I.
My father is a teacher.So does my mother.I am a office worker.My father and my mother are teaching in the same school,they usually go to work by car.I usually go to work on foot but sometimes I go to work by bike.
My father likes playing football very much.My mother likes watching TV.I like reading books.
This is my family.Do you like my family?
My Plan for the Spring Festival
Spring Festival is the most important festival in China .I have a good plan for the Spring Festival.
Firstly,I will visit Mr.Huang who is my junior school teacher.He is from Beijing.I learned a lot form him when I studied in junior school.
Secondly,I will read a few books.In my opinion,book is man's best friend,reading book is very useful.
Finally,I will also have a rest for the Spring Festival.
This is my plan for the Spring Festival,what about yours?

Please refer to my resume/CV for more details about my work.
你原来的版本也没啥大问题,不过略改后显得更加正式一些.另外,if interested多余了,是中国式英语的思维习惯,人家不感兴趣自然不会去看的,是不是?一定要加上,恐怕也要改成if you are interested in it,但是在是别扭,强烈建议去掉.

细节在润色,我觉得老师的意思是说,你的主题、内容情节写的都很好,但语言功底有所欠缺,比如同是说心情差,你说心情差和我的心里的世界飘着阴云密布,这两种说法就差距很大.

The artist almost has finished his masterpiece,except for a little polishing .

Last Thursday,I went toEnglish corner with my friends firstly.What a wonderful experience and I wouldlike to share it with you next.
When I came into theclassroom,I saw a man who wears a black mask holding an opaque bag.Except forhim,there were also another two teachers.One was an enchanting woman,who wassitting on the table.The other was an old man with white bread who I saw insome charity activity.I said hello to him .when I sit down,surprisingly,themystery man took out some candies from his bag to me.I expressed gratitude tohim.
Firstly,we played aninteresting game.One of the foreign teachers showed us some cards with Englishwords on them.By his guidance,we stuck the cards on our forehead withoutknowing what it was written.Then they asked us to choose a partner freely andguessed the vocabulary with each other.I cooperated with the mystery teacherwho had dropped off the mask.I firstly asked him,is it food?He said no.Next,I asked whether it is in the classroom.He nodded kindly.The talkcontinued for a few minutes without any progress.Lastly,I had no choice butto ask for some hints .He reminded me that it is usual in American primaryschool,while it is absent in Chinese classroom.Finally,I gave up and seen itwhere Flag was written on it.
When the game was over,wechatted with foreign teachers in groups.They asked about our major.My majoris psychology.About psychology,we talked for a long time.He said seeingpsychologist in Americais common and expensive.It is a good idea if I intended to earn considerablemoney in America.But I explained that my English is not good enough to do it.He advisedhumorously why not find a foreign boyfriend which aroused laughter.Dreams werediscussed too.When asked what my dream is,I answered that my dream is earningenough money to travel around the world and when I am old,farming is also agood choice.We also talked about many other topics,such as our traditionalfestivals and traveling experience.
My first interculturalcommunication experience is so meaningful and I know more about the differencebetween America and China.In a world,the most essential is that I break out of shyness and show myself bravely.

跟外国客户写信 文字简单 直白让人能看懂就好
我在美国上大学, 经常跟教授邮件往来,邮件质量放心.
Dear XX【客户名】,
I have attached the documents you wanted to the email. I filled out the consignee as XX, but on the invoice I put xxxx, as usual. Since the fluctuations of the currency rate are pretty large, I chosed today's currency rate, 6.12 RMB per USD. Therefore the price is converted to 7 USD.
If you find anything mistaken in these documents, please notify me. If not, I will contact the freight forwarding company immediately.
I've also consulted Ms.Gao for the H.S.Code, and she said it was different from previous years, so I have to look it up. From what I found, the code seems to be 6211. Does that look correct to you?
If you have any further questions, please feel free to reply this email. Thank you!
Best wishes,
【你自己的名字】

1.Expo makes the world know more about China which is modernized and ambitious.
2.It shows that China is capable of holding any big world event.
3.It offers more work positions for people.