托福作文求助这样的作文几分?My perspective of whether should the hight sch

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托福作文求助这样的作文几分?
My perspective of whether should the hight schools give a group of students the same mark is definite, they should not.
Education, a integral and significant filed of human society ,also have the divergence of views among lots of educator . The group work is a common activity in today's college study, and should all of the student in the group get a same mark? I have already clarified my standpoint, and now there are a couple of reasons.
For starters, If all the students in a group get the same mark , a phenomenon that some of the student in the group might not work hard would happen, even some of the students in the group are just waiting for a A. This a not fair ,particularly to the students who worked hard. And if we give the different marks by judging each student's effort, It may be a better way.
Besides, By giving the different mark, students will understand an principle that "Achievement cost perspiration ." And this motto not only works in study ,but also works in the whole life. So by giving the different mark, It's beneficial for students to pursue a better future.
What's more, The motive of team work is not let someone rest and others work hard, the real motive is improving the efficiency and create coordinating capability. To achieve this target we should not give all the students the same mark.
In addition, someone may say"giving the same mark made a team look like a team". We can not deny this advantage, and giving the different mark also have it's drawbacks . both these two ways have their advantages and drawbacks , but concerning it in a provident way and think the issue deeply, It is safely to say that giving the different mark is a better way.
So, all in all, The high schools and universities should give students different marks, even thought they are in a same group.

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fredashang 共回答了18个问题 | 采纳率88.9%
小错误比较多 比如应是Achievement costS perspiration
你语法不扎实
词还不错,背得比我多
分数应是3.5-4.5
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if you were a besinessman,it might be more easilier for you to get investment from one of your classmates who had became an investor of a large company;
小弟的托福作文,菜鸟在此感激不尽!
小弟的托福作文,菜鸟在此感激不尽!
Why people attend college?
People attend college for many different reasons (for example,new experiences,career preparation.increased knowledge).Why do you think people attend college or university?Use specific reasons & examples to support your answer?
Colleges and universities are becoming increasingly common these years.The situation is so different from which in past few decades.This means that a college student is no more considered extremely precious in the need of employees.High school students,however,still crowd into college campuses after graduation.
What makes the students do so may firstly be the necessity of obtaining more knowledge and skills.As is mentioned previously,an undergraduate student seems to have lost his unique predominance in some professional fields.In my experience,some people who have never received any higher education but with a great accumulation of experience during internship often perform more sophisticated in work.But these people may be limited to just a few fields,especially to some area related to social communication.Compared to them,college students have got a widely range of technique including some communicating wrists.So when he steps into society,he may be competent to do various kinds of jobs.
Secondly,a high school is never like a real career place,especially in some countries such as China,which pushes students to take huge vigor against numerous coming exams.As soon as a student leaves the high school,he is actually not mature enough to blend in the circle of adults who have been running in this field for several years.The fact is that some pure students even don't know how to build a bank account.The college campus thus becomes the best bridge to connect the two aspects.Students here are involved in more activities related to peripheral society and become more skilful to deal with matters they might meet in the future.
Additionally,employers nowadays apparently prefer applicants with diploma of famous colleges or universities to the ones without,though they may be both outstanding.A perfect high school grade has been a lack of sufficiency to distinguish one from others because it only indicates that you are good at preparation.The certificate of college has been a recognized proof that shows you are an excellent job hunter with abundant skills solving problems.
finally,college is the vital way to improve the stuff of the citizen in a whole country.People gain more gentler ethos along with necessary information and knowledge,so they are just making their effort to meet the requirement of the nation and culture.
metavip1年前1
coolhan99 共回答了20个问题 | 采纳率70%
很好啦.
看看我的托福作文写得怎么样,这样大概能得多少分?
看看我的托福作文写得怎么样,这样大概能得多少分?
In response to the problem,many people may argue that people can learn more from watching TV.However,there also emerges some opposites which assert that people can learn more from reading book than by watching TV.For me,I agree with the latter point because of following reasons.When it comes to the positive aspect of reading book.First of all,it is convenience for us.For example,we can take book on the professor’s class,but we can’t going to professor’s class carry TV.This is because the shape of book is small and it is easy to carrying.Secondly,we can be carried wherever go and be read whenever we want.Unlike the TV,it can be used must contact with electric.Basic to understanding the benefic of the reading book we can get from academic term aspect.Book knowledge is better structured and more systematic.Some math and chemical theory can have best expression in the book.This is why the professor bring the book to shows the knowledge for students rather than watching TV to complete the class.Besides,sometimes students can take some notes on the book to protect them from loss remember.Therefore,people can learn more from reading book than by watching TV.It is acknowledged that reading book has become indispensable role in every corner of people ‘s daily life.Reading books nor only benefit for knowledge,but also for our healthy.For example,when we watching TV,the TV will radiate a line that’s called radiation which could break down the health of people also bring disaster for people’s sight.While,if we reading the book,it is a good way for people maintain health.So that,reading book has become indispensable role in every corner of people’s life.To sum up,what has been discussed above could prove reading book can letting people learn more than watching TV.
殷楚1年前1
zouruofei 共回答了18个问题 | 采纳率94.4%
25左右.字数太少,我作文28分,写了432个字呢.
还有就是词汇欠丰富,用点高端的词汇与句型吧.不过切忌瞎用.
托福作文求批改,谢谢,给出等级The topic of education never failed to raise
托福作文求批改,谢谢,给出等级
The topic of education never failed to raise a hot issue among public. Some people think that teaching is easier than before duo to the advanced facilities such as computers and projectors. As for me, however, even though with developed technology, teaching is harder than it was in the past.
First, nowadays, parents attach more importance to children’s academic performance. They care about the quality of the education that their kids received. Consequently, teachers undertake more pressure than before. If they don’t teach well, they will get complaint from parents and even lose the opportunity of promotion. Take my family as an example, when my mother was in school, my grandmother never asked her about the grade, either urge her to study. But when I was in high school, my mother paid attention to my score in every test. She also kept close contact with my teachers to know my academic performance. As you can see, the pressure from parents makes teaching harder.
What’s more, in order to attract more students, schools establish a series of policy to teachers. For example, schools organize students to appraise teachers periodically, and according the assessment to reward or punish teachers. So teachers must worker harder to avoid punishment. And in some school, they set high standards when they employing teachers. Only highly educated candidates can be engaged. So, if one wants to become a teacher, he or she has to get a credential which is much higher than before.
Finally, duo to the widespread of computers and handphones, people can get the latest news from all over the world. That is to say, a teacher’s behavior is supervised by the society. For example, a kindergarten in my hometown once provoked a heated discussion in society. A teacher of that kindergarten scolded a little boy and fisticuff him. Then someone put the video on website, soon after, many people watched the video and were annoyed with the rude teacher. The teacher turned out to be dismissed even though she apologized to the boy and society. The teacher’s behavior is inappropriate, thanks to the website, the teacher get punishment. The case manifests that public also value education, and with the help of modern technology, they get more information about teachers. Teachers are supposed to work better to get respect.
Teachers play a fundamental role in all aspect of society, so the requirements of teachers turn stricter. Teaching is harder than before, but there are many undergraduates devote themselves to this career because of the enthusiasm.
无限道1年前1
shrm1234 共回答了13个问题 | 采纳率84.6%
我看了一下,大概就是fair的等级,到不了good,但是毕竟你字数还是够的,能在fair里面算比较好的。文章主要问题是,第一有语法拼写错误,你丢到word里,就能查出来,其次句式还是偏单一了,基本都是简单句和and连接的并列句,从句倒装强调都没太用,如果精益求精你的句子也表达的不是特别清楚。像第一段里than before,前面没写现在的教育,你的句子说的是教育和before在作比较,显然是不对的...
帮我改一下这篇托福作文,据说句子太繁琐而且用词简单.
帮我改一下这篇托福作文,据说句子太繁琐而且用词简单.
The friends that youcan have fun with are more important than the friends that you can get helpfrom?
We are live in a gregarious society,relying oncooperation to sustain our life.So everyone needs friends.Some friends arefunny; some friends are like-minded; some friends can help you a lot; somefriends are only fair-weather friend.Some people holds the idea that thefriends that you can have fun with are more important than the friends that youcan get help from.By contrast,in my eyes,the friends who can help you a lotare much more significant than the friends who can make you laugh.My reasonsare following.
There is no denying that the friends that you can havefun with are essencial in your life.You can make phone calls,have parties or goshopping with them,abandon yourselves to fun.But they are only fair-weatherfriends,who are only with you when in good conditions.When you have to facesome difficulties,they will give you the air and disappear.Let’s take thefamous movie,the Great Gatsby which adapted from anovel of the same name for an example.When the protagonist,Gatsby was rich,there were so many people around him,complimenting his success and generosity,going to his luxury castle-like vila to attend his parties weekly and havingfun with him.Daisy,his old lover who already got married,also rebuilt therelationship with him.However,when Gatsby got bogged down in crisis,thesefair-weather friends have all gone and left him alone.Daisy also decided toabandon Gatsby.At last,even when Gatsby died,only few people came to hisfuneral.At that time,Daisy was out for a trip to Europe with her husband.Allthese people were just avaricious of Gatsby’s money,tending to base theirrelationship on Gateby’s status and success.
However,on the one head,everyone’s ability and ideasare limited.All of us will meet some difficulties which is hard to deal with.Sometimes,you have to face some delimma that can not be handled by yourselves.At that time,you will find how important the friends who can give you a handare.The force of a person is extremely limited,but if you have many friends thatyou can get help from,then the power of an organization is inapproachable.Inthis way,you can get out of the mess,which you can not expect to get from thefair-weather friends.On the other hand,two heads are better than one head.Ifyou have genuine friends that you can get help from,you can help each otherand exchange your ideas.In this manner,you can open your mind and make you morecreative and thoughtful.
In conclusion,as far as I am concerned,the friends whoare helpful are more important than the funny ones.They won’t abandon you andleave you alone when you are in trouble.As the old saying goes,a friend inneed is a friend in deed,the helpful friends will with you no matter theweather is fair or bad.
lx19841年前1
兰欣wf 共回答了19个问题 | 采纳率89.5%
这么长!先改一段您试看,若满意,再继续.
The friends with whom (that) you can have fun are more important than the friends from whom you can get help?
We are living (live) in a gregarious society, relying on cooperation to maintain (sustain) our life. So, everyone needs friends. Some friends are funny; some friends are like-minded; some friends can help you a lot; some friends are only fair-weather friends. Some people holds the idea that the friends whom you can have fun with are more important than the friends whom you can get help from. By contrast, in my eyes, the friends who (can) help you a lot are much more significant than the friends who can make you laugh. My arguements (reasons) are following.
请高手看看这篇托福作文能拿多少分啊?
请高手看看这篇托福作文能拿多少分啊?
大概估下吧.
题目是Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher.Others think that it is always better to have a teacher.Which do you prefer?Use specific reasons to develop your essay.
正文↓
Since everyone has their unique method of learning,whether people should learn with a teacher or not really depends on the person.However,based on my experience,I believe that learning with a teacher will definitely make studying easier.
First of all,having a teacher who has more knowledge in the area you learn than you do to teach you will make studying more effective.It is true that certain group of people can learn by themselves by simply reading the text.However,wouldn’t learning be fun if you have someone to transform the boring text into colorful lectures as well as reading the text?Wouldn’t studying be easier if you have someone to answer your questions?By learning with a teacher,you can actually choose between reading a text yourself and listening to the lectures.
Secondly,most people need a motivation to continue learning.Since not all people can maintain their passion toward learning something for a long period time of studying,a teacher is needed to keep them on track.With a teacher’s organized study schedule,students will able to finish a course quicker.
Last but not least,a teacher may not only be a lead of our studying but also a role model for learners.And a role model is certainly significant to a student whose view of the world is being established.For instance,when a physics major student has a professor who has received a famous physics award,the teacher may become his or her role model and make the student be willing to learn for his or her career goal and great honor instead of just getting a degree for applying a job.
In conclusion,the reason why I think learning with a teacher will be more effective is that a teacher helps your understand easily,force you to keep on track,and give you a strong desire to learn.If you prefer to learn by yourself,having a teacher won’t interrupt your way of studying and,therefore,not make any differences.Thus,even though people all have their own ways of learning,I believe learning with a teacher will only benefit you.
有什么致命弱点吗?
tnn20001年前1
5424499 共回答了12个问题 | 采纳率100%
条理清晰,但是套用模板痕迹很重,词汇不够高级,不会得到一个很高的分数,中等.
致命的弱点:
1、尽量不用模板,用自己的东西.
2、加强词汇的记忆,从文章看出词汇是你的弱点.多用高级词汇.
托福作文 抽象的题目怎么写?就比如怎么证明advertising is the most important cause
托福作文 抽象的题目怎么写?就比如怎么证明advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eatin
就比如怎么证明advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits.强调most.
天之河1年前1
oceanandston 共回答了13个问题 | 采纳率100%
topic:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
Advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits.
my essay:
Nowadays many people have developed unhealthy eating habits.The reasons are various,including advertising.But advertising is definitely not the most important one.
Indeed,some food advertisements exaggerate the nutrition of the food,or invent some superstars to be advertising spokesperson which attract the stars’ fans to buy the food.I’ve seen an advertisement of mineral water on TV,which says their water is from a nature lake free of pollution,with some healthy mineral salt.After this TV advertisement is broadcast,since the advertising spokesman is a popular singer,a lot of young people who like the singer have bought the water of this brand.However,the quality control bureau made their research on the water open,which said that the natural lake actually contains much contamination.Customers said that they have been cheated by the advertisement.Considerable the effect of the advertisement is,it cannot compete with the influence of people’s life style when pressure and price are taken in to account.
I believe,the living tempo is in fact the principal reason of unhealthy eating habits,which is increasingly fast so that people have to shorten their time cooking,choosing what to eat and eating,in order to spend the saved time on working or studying.Thus fast food becomes popular since it saves time.People do not care fast food is junk food; they care whether they could finish their tasks on time and if they could accomplish their work better than others.It is common that one forgets his lunch time and keeps working until midnight.Irregular eating time and junk food make the eating habit of modern people extremely unhealthy.Even some people have no time watching TV or newspapers,so they don’t know about advertisements.How do those advertisements have any effect on them?Only when people are aware of that they are earning money in exchange of their health and stop this terrible process will they
Finally,the price of healthy food is usually high,so people may choose unhealthy food just because of the price.Once in supermarket I saw that eggs are much more expensive that are laid by chicken which are not injected with hormone than those laid by chicken with hormone injections.Although we know that the expensive eggs are healthier,we still chose the cheaper eggs since the price is too high to purchase.Capable of affording healthy food are those people who own lots of money.If food manufactures produce food with more attention to people’s wholesomeness,there would be more healthy food that can be purchased by common people.
All in all,there are lots of reasons that led people develop unhealthy habit,of course,including advertisement.From my perspective,the most important one is that we have less time on preparing eating and think little about it.
谈自己的看法,不一定要绝对同意,或者绝对不同意.写的时候可以分析一下,广告对于不健康的饮食习惯起到了什么作用.再展开思考一下,不健康的饮食习惯是怎么引起的,还有其他的什么原因.比如个人挑食啊,没有好的生活习惯,导致没有按时吃饭,等等.慢慢的就可以把文章展开,写长了.
托福作文求评分Topic72 Do you agree or disagree with the following s
托福作文求评分
Topic72 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Grades (marks) encourage students to learn.Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
It has been a long time for teachers to use grades to encourage students to learn.Frankly speaking,I do not think this method works.Grades,on the contrary,may actually discourage students’ passion in learning.The reasons I used to illustrate my point of view will be given in the rest of the passage.
Nowadays,students have so much pressure from their everyday life and those who received low grades in the subjects will have much more pressure since parents will be likely to compare their grades with those of their classmates.So these students will have so much pressure on them that they may lose the interests in learning and learning has become a burden to them.As a result,these students may probably fall behind in their class and will no longer care their grades at all.
Moreover,grades may have counteractive on students’ study.After receiving a high grade in a subject,some students will lose their momentum in study.They will perceive that they are very good at this subject and they do not need to put too much time in studying it anymore.This kind of thoughts is very normal in many students.For instance,when I was in middle,I did well in my chemistry and it was very easy for me to get full marks in the exams.However,I gradually spent less and less time in chemistry.As it is known to everyone,learning is a long term process,so once I got lazy in my study,my grade dropped and I could not did as great as I used to do any more.All in all,grades may actually cause students to fall behind in the class.
To sum up,I am convinced that grades cannot encourage students to study; rather,it may have counteractive to study.
如果在真实考试的话这作文大概多少分?有什么要改进的地方?
bymi781年前1
孙榕1978 共回答了17个问题 | 采纳率88.2%
结尾过于简短,结尾需要重申总论点和分论点,大概22分的样子
关于托福作文、口语我问题才听说托福作文有题库,还是官方的?求教真假?是综合写作还是独立写作?哪里能得到呢?
hangeingiengagad1年前1
你是猪吧 共回答了17个问题 | 采纳率100%
托福有官方185题库,里面是185道题.差不多的所有方面都有覆盖,但是在考试中应该不会考到原题.185题库有PDF版的独立写作,每道题目都有三篇文章作参考,很不错.
忽然发现极智批改网一个友好的bug,提交托福作文批改不限时啊,这样会养成惰性吗?
chhsjw1年前3
nujiel98 共回答了18个问题 | 采纳率83.3%
你是说超时了还能提交是吧?我觉得就是故意设计的,他那个提示时间也就是让你有点紧迫感,真要是超时就白写了,不被骂死才怪
请大家帮忙看看这篇托福作文能得多少分?
请大家帮忙看看这篇托福作文能得多少分?
always tell the truth is the most important thing in any relationships?agree/disagree
嗯..文如下.
Whether or not always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship is debated by many people.Some people believe that being honest is the basic therefore the most important thing in a relationship,while I doubt the importance of being honest is not everything in a relationship.
First of all,what I seek in a relationship is love,not the truth.It is true that most people find a person tend to seem more trustful if he or she always tells the truth.However,telling the truth is not the most important thing in a relationship.For example,when you are looking for a partner,most people do not try to find a completely honest person but a person who love them and is able to understand and support them when they are down.Also,what you seek from a family member is caring and understanding.Honesty is considered very important but most people find a white lie will not be harmful to a relationship as long as there is love between them.
Secondly,even though telling the truth is important,always telling the truth is sometimes unnecessary in a relationship.A common example would be a student who is not very talented at math will not find his or her relationship with a friend unreliable if his or her friend encourages or even lies to make him or her feel better after a math test.
In addition,there are many different types of relationships,which means telling the truth weighs differently in different types of relationships.Being honest may be the most important consideration in a business relationship where cheats and distrusts will greatly harm the harmony between people.However,the most important thing in other relationships such as relationship between family members and lovers will also depends on which type of relationship it is.
In conclusion,always telling the truth is important but is not the most important consideration in a relationship because there is no meaning of a relationship if there is only honesty instead of love.Since being completely honest is not always necessary and different relationships weigh being honest differently,a statement such as “always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship” is very unaccurate.
aatoni1年前3
sharonhyy 共回答了11个问题 | 采纳率90.9%
个人感觉不会超过23分,估计21分左右,我将从结构和用词句两方面说明
结构方面:有明确论点,但论据稍显薄弱.但有一个致命缺点...楼主在首段只阐述了现状,没有明确给出自己观点,首段一定要给出明确观点,agree or disagree 不要做出含糊表达.
词句方面:造句方面楼主在句型已具一定变化,但观点最好要paraphase不要抄题目..大问题出在用词上,important some等4级以下词汇频繁出现,会让考官怀疑楼主词汇量..举例而言通篇讲重要只有important这一个词..重复痕迹明显,考官会怀疑你是否只会这一个词,但显然楼主TOEFL词背了不止7 8 遍了..多用替换essential vital significant等
楼主发个问题肯定不是就为了看个分数找个自信的,肯定是来找问题,所以不要怪我太苛刻 ,建议加强词语训练
托福作文可以用少量口语化的句子么
托福作文可以用少量口语化的句子么
例如 it is not a big deal 等
gf9001年前1
雨在云中 共回答了17个问题 | 采纳率94.1%
是可以的.not a big deal并不是太过于口语化.把握好度就行,不要用都市俚语就好啦!祝你考试成功'
托福作文求批改Nowadays,many people discuss if teachers should make
托福作文求批改
Nowadays,many people discuss if teachers should make their social or political views known to students in the classroom.Many people may disagree with teacher make their social or political view known to students because they think social or political views are not closely related to class knowledge.It wastes a lot of time to teach these views to students.However,there are also many people think it’s good for student that teachers talk about social problem at class.We can't say which one is wrong because each answer has its reason.In my opinion,I think teacher should make their social or political view known to students in the classroom.
Firstly,we should to think about political or social things in our age.So teachers can guide us to understand the society.We are now the age of 16.This means that two years later we will become an adult.When we become an adult,we must to care the politics and social.They are very necessary to us life.Our teacher always makes his social or political views known to us in the classroom.He said many of the view are very correct.He often explains some reasons about social events in his class..I think it is good for us to develop and know the world.
Secondly,teachers can tell us a lot of social or political views from the adult perspective.Adults have experienced things more than us.They think things more comprehensive.We are teenagers,so we just live in a world simply that do not need us to think things more difficult.Therefore,teachers can tell us something more comprehensive.From this,we can also learn a lot of method of thinking social or political things.
Lastly,the teacher tells about social or political views in class can make us won’t feel bored.If teachers only teach knowledge from books,we will not have a lot of interest in class.The class will be very boring.Maybe we will sleep in the class or think other things in class.If teachers tell something except books,maybe we will focus on the teacher.Therefore,we will not feel tired in class.I like teachers who like make their social or political views known to students in the classroom.
In conclusion,I would like to say,people have different thinking from different angles.All of them are correct.So we can't say which one is not correct.Because it is all our own opinions and others from the perspective of they will disagree with us.I think teachers should make their social or political views known to students in the classroom.
ho6ho6301年前1
realdos 共回答了20个问题 | 采纳率90%
Nowadays, many people discuss if(改用whether 会较好) teachers should make their social or political views known to students in the classroom(classrooms 用复数). Many people may disagree with teacher(teachers要用复数) make(要改为making) their social or political view known to students because they think social or political views are not closely related to class knowledge. It wastes a lot of time to teach these views to students. However, there are also many people think it’s good for student(students) that(改用 when 或 if) teachers talk about social problem(problems要用复数) at(是 in) class(classes要用复数). We can't say which one is wrong because each answer has its reason(reasons要用复数). In my opinion, I think teacher(teachers) should make their social or political view known to students in the classroom.
Firstly, we should think about political or social things(要改为issues) in our age. So teachers can guide us to understand the society(要加better). We are now (要加at) the age of 16. This means that two years later we will become an adult. When we become an adult, we must (to care the 要改为 care about) politics and social (要加 matters / issues). They are very necessary(要改用important) to us(是our) life. Our teacher(teachers) (要加should 因为是你的意见) always makes(make) his(their) social or political views known to us in the classroom(s). He(要改为they)(should) (said many of the view are very correct这节表达有问题,要改为 provide us with the correct view). He(要改为They 加 should) often explains(explain) some reasons about social events in his(their) class(classes).. I think it is good for us to develop and (要加 to) know the world.
Secondly, teachers can tell us a lot of social or political views from the(要改为 their) adult perspective. Adults have experienced things more than us. They (要加 can) think (要加 of) things more comprehensive(用comprehensively 是副词). We are teenagers, so we just live in a world simply that do not need us to think (of) things (要加 with) more difficult(要改为 difficulties). Therefore, teachers can tell us something more comprehensive. From this, we can also learn a lot of method(methods) of thinking (of) social or political things(要改为matters 或 issues).
Lastly, the teacher tells(应该用 talk) about social or political views in class(classes) (can make us won’t feel bored 这句表达混乱不清,要改为 won't make us feeling bored). If teachers only teach knowledge from books, we will not have a lot of interest in class(classes). The class(classes) will be very boring. Maybe we will sleep (去掉in the class太重复) or think (要加 about)other things in class(classes). If teachers tell(要改为 talk about) something except(要改为 apart from) books, maybe we will focus on the teacher(teachers 要加 more /better). Therefore, we will not feel tired in class(classes). (应该要加Therefore) I like teachers who like (要加 to) make their social or political views known to students in the classroom(s).
In conclusion, I would like to say, people have different thinking from different angles. All of them (are correct 并非全是正确,只可以说是各有各的理由 have their own reasons). So we can't say which one is not correct. Because it is(they are) all our own opinions and (others from the perspective of they 这一节我不大明白你想表达甚麼,所以无法替你更正,但照理推测,应该是: those with the similar perspective) will disagree with us(应该是me 因为这是你自己的意见).( I think teachers should make their social or political views known to students in the classroom.这句可以去掉,因为已重复了很多次!)

已替你更正了过来,但很抱歉地说,文章有很多处有错.句子也太多重复.不过,还是祝你学业进步!

很希望会对你有帮助.若满意请采纳,谢谢你.
帮我点评一下这篇托福作文,看看能多少分
帮我点评一下这篇托福作文,看看能多少分
Should the money invested into a university library be used to buy books or to buy computers?What do you think?Why?
Nowadays With the rapid development of advanced the computer technology in the modern society,more and more people tend to search the information by the computer,and it is commonly and widely used in our day life.Obviously it is more efficient and convenient than reading the books.So the libraries often face the dilemma of whether to invest in books or computers.With all aspects carefully considered,I think invest in the computers would be a better choice
When the library equipped with computers,you may find the information swifter than before.The students can get the information as soon as they can if they use computers.In other words,you may take a lot of time on searching books on the bookshelf if you want to find some information on books in a traditional library without computers.On the contrary,if you want to find some information on computer,you can just typing the key words and clicking the mouse,after that,the information what you want is showed in your eyesight
Secondly,it is relatively easier for the librarian to management the computers rather than books.Well,for one thing just imagine that a lot of students are required by the teacher searching the information on the books with a couple of time and they are so busy that some of them did not put the books in place.Then the librarian should take a lot of time to put them back.But as to management the computers,what the librarian should do is just checking the mistakes on the computer periodically and turn them off regularly.All in all the computer could facilitate the librarian doing a lot of works.Another thing is that the books may circuit very fast and hard to copy therefore a lot of books may be destroyed by careless or accident and can’t be reserved for a long time.But as to computer the data and the information could be reserved permanently.
Admittedly,books do have it own advantages over computers.They are easy to carry,comfortable to read,however,the computers have more valuable merits as an efficient,durable,management means for libraries of the new century,and this is the important tendency of the modern world.
In conclusion,I reinforce my standpoint to choose to computers as my final choice for the investment.
626352641年前3
myguoju1014 共回答了16个问题 | 采纳率87.5%
我觉得呢,整体的结构很好很清楚,论述有条理.
好的地方就不说太多了,说点我感觉到的问题?倒也不算什么问题,我也是学生一起讨论吧.
个人倾向于把让步段往前面放 但是我考托福的时候让步也在后面,感觉也没问题.
支持段只有两个呀,可以补充一个,短一点也没关系
结尾虽然没有实际作用但是可以写的再充实一点吧……
语法有小地方的问题,但这个程度不会扣分.有些用词还能改进.
额……唉我也是比较弱的……我打分的话,给25吧
托福作文求思路In order to be well-informed,a person must get inform
托福作文求思路
in order to be well-informed,a person must get
information from many different news resources.
这怎么想啊.***了
请问从哪方面入手.
寂寂之筵1年前2
雪域水水 共回答了19个问题 | 采纳率78.9%
2个思路
第一个思路,同意:-运用多种工具我们能获得更多的信息.电脑电视广播报纸blabla.举个例子说,有一次和同学讨论问题,你不是很了解,于是你通过网络查了一下,然后阅读了很多很多信息和观点以后,你弄明白了这个问题.可以说新闻热点讨论的话题也可以是学术问题.然后总结,有了更多的工具我们能够主动去获得信息,然后变得well-informed.
- 通过运用新的工具,能够节约我们的时间,提高我们找信息的效率.然后你就说,以前在图书馆找资料多么花时间,现在在网上搜方便又省时间.
第二个思路,不同意:-更多的工具,有更多的信息,使我们一时间消化不了.会花费更多的时间去筛选.
- 信息不一定都是真实的.
托福作文一篇,请求赐教.下面是我自己写的作文,请大侠和老师帮忙看看我这样的水平能的几分?以及不足之
托福作文一篇,请求赐教.下面是我自己写的作文,请大侠和老师帮忙看看我这样的水平能的几分?以及不足之
Should children be required to help with household tasks as soon as they
are able to do so?
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Children should be required to help with
household tasks as soon as they are able to do so.Use specific reasons and examples to support your
answer.
It has been discussing about a controversial issue that whether parents should let their children do household tasks when they are old enough.As far as I know,most parents in China require their children to do housework when they are in proper age like 15 years old or so.And I do agree with them.It is very important for children to do some sorts of housework as they are able to do it.
Admittedly,there are some bad consequences if parents ask their children to do chores early.As we all know that playing is the major nature of children.They spend much time playing games such as sports,computer games and hobbies.They would probably not be willing to do chores which would definitely take their lots of time that spend on interesting and attractive games.Even worse,if parents demand them to do that seriously,they will be angry and even hate their parents.That is obviously not what parents expected.On the other hand,nowadays there is more and more homework putting into children.They have to do their homework overnight especially for Chinese students.Therefore they are certainly busy with their homework,and do not have additional time to do chores which will surely takes more than 30 minutes.In generally,however,children will get more advantages by doing chores.
The most essential advantage is that they can be more independent through doing chores.For example,when they clean up their rooms,they will learn how to sweep the floor without using a lot of water; how to put their books in order according to classification; how to put their chairs correctly in order to avoid scratching the floor.After that,they will be proud of themselves ,and believe they can do something without parents.They will also understand how hard their parents are to look after them when they were little.In addition,doing household early can make them adapt to their alone living in the future better.
When I was a teenager,I was very tired of doing chores.Every time when my parents ask me to do some cleaning,I always lost my temper with them,and thought they enslaved me.But at last,I still had to do that.As I grew up,and came into a college.I surprisedly found that I did do better in personal living aspect than my other roommates.I really appreciate my parents asked me to do chores early otherwise I won’t be so smooth to handle such things.
In conclusion,it is very important for children to do household tasks when they are able to do them.It is parents’ responsibility that they require their children to do chores in order to avoid having troubles in their personal alone living in the future.
空中网1年前1
小黑人行者 共回答了17个问题 | 采纳率82.4%
你写的很好!
谁能帮忙打一下分数(托福作文)Topic:Some young adults want independence fro
谁能帮忙打一下分数(托福作文)
topic:
some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible.other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time.which of these situations do you think is better?use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
my essay:
nowadays,people are getting more and more independent.when people are independent from their parents,they can be free and they can get much skills from life.as far as i concerned,the situation that young adults want independent from their parents as soon as possible is better.
first of all,if people are independent from their parents,there two advantages.on the one hand,people can be free.they can eat whatever they want,while they have to eat what their parents cook for them if they live with their parents.for instance,i want to have something special to eat,but my parents cook as usually.i have no choice but eat what my parents cook for me.this may make people feel unpleasant.
on the other hand,i can learn a lot if i do not live with my parents for a very long time.i can learn how to cook,how to do houseworks and how to deal with my living things.for example,i have to learn how to cook,when i live alone.thus,i master a skill-----cooking.what’s more,i can cook for my friends when they come to my home,which is a very pleasant thing for me.
also,there are some advantages when people live with their parents for a very long time.they sleep for a longer time and need not to cook in the morning,because their parents can prepare breakfast for them.and they need not to do houseworks,for their parents do all for them.nothing is more important than to learn skill.
the advantages that living with parents for a long time brings about are considerable,however they can not compete with the benefits that being independent from parents leads to,if *** and learning skill are taken into consideration.
to sum it up,it is a good idea to be independent from families as soon as possible.
爱你60秒1年前1
无人知晓 共回答了17个问题 | 采纳率76.5%
personal rating:3
your essay is fairly organized ,with a easy and simply stucture swiftly guiding readers to undertand your "storyline".That's a good thing,keep going!However,the irritating grammar flaws and poorly dispensed examples greatly cripple the fluency and efficacy of your essay.
Here are 3 ways to help you get a higher point:
1,Pay more attention to your potential grammar mistakes.Practicing more and then you will find out that you may make the same mistakes over and over again,e.g.run on sentences,tense errors,etc.Keep your eyes on these mistakes and try to avoid them next time.
2 Think before you write the essay.Making a sketch can also help.Right now you are not successful to demonstrate your points and arguments clearly,and the examples are far too simple to be convicing .Keep in mind:persuade people,don't make fool of them.
3 Revise your transitional paragraph.To say in a blunt way,your transitional sentences make me confused and I have spent several minutes scratching my head wondering what your points are.Do not make your transtional words and expression contradict with your previous statements.There is no certain way to articulate yourself,so if you are not so proficient in making a transition,try something else.
一道托福作文机经do you agree or disagree with the following statemen
一道托福作文机经
do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Since people care public recognition more than money, they will work harder to obtain public recognition even though there is no more money given. Use specific reasons to support your answer.要观点加例子!谢谢!
rokyy1年前0
共回答了个问题 | 采纳率
托福作文,求思路,三点,不用写,只用思路就行
托福作文,求思路,三点,不用写,只用思路就行
Do you agree or disagree with the following
statement.
It is important to make
sure that others know about your strengths and accomplishments; if you are not
so,you will be never successful in life.
scsherry1年前1
21222dee 共回答了23个问题 | 采纳率87%
Disagree.Accomplishments will get invaluable if they are too much shown.Other people may be jealous and obstruct your further development.可能会下意识地(subliminally)变得沾沾自喜,不思进取.
求求大家帮帮我看看我的托福作文吧
求求大家帮帮我看看我的托福作文吧
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The most important aspect of a job is the money a person earns.Use specific reason and examples to support your answer.
正文:
A profound changes of the conception of money have been seen in recent years.Nowadays,many people consider that the most essential aspect of career is how much a person earns.Meanwhile,still some deem that the most significant aspect for a job is whether we are interested in it or not.I agree the former.The most curical aspect of a career is the money a person gains.
Firstly,I want to point out that,people can not have a satisfied life without the supporting of money.If we find a job which is just your interest or sometimes it can not bring a satisfied salary.It will not only effect the relationship of the family but also making the bad quality of the life.A real example is that,a friend of mine,who was very good at swimming when he was young.He practiced swimming all the time instead of learning the knowledge in school.he became a swimmer who is not famous and just earns a little amount of salary.His wife was extremely unsatisfied with her life because of her husband’s low income.Finally she left him .So that is the reason that the most essential aspect of a career is the income person gains.
In addition,it is difficult to enjoy our life without having a high enough salary.People are not able to enjoy theirselves when they do not have enough money to support their extra spending.Such travelling around the world,having a short sightseeing or having a meaningful dinner in a high level restaurant.My uncle is an example.His name is Jake who is a farmer and gains a very low income which can just support his basic life.He is very looking forward to doing something like an affluence people do.He does not have enough money to support him because of his low salary.It is reason that the most significant part of a job is the money people earn.
In conclusion,the most important aspect of a job is that how much a person earns,because we people can not enjoy theirselves by spending extra money with a low income,also it will break up their family if people do not earn enough money to let the life comfortable.
石板鱼1年前3
冰之沸点37 共回答了12个问题 | 采纳率91.7%
主要问题就是例子吧,因为我之前考过SAT,发现其实TOEFL的例子不用那么详细,你可以试着用一句话把例子总结出来,什么人名完全不用写的.
还有,不要为了加单词而加单词咯,开头我不是很喜欢,我比较倾向于在开头就把自己的观点在段末总结起来.
托福一般要写三点,如果你想不到三点可以在最后做一个反驳,类似于A说我的观点是不对的,但我发现A是特例,我的观点才是普遍……凑字数很有效的.
高手帮我看一下托福作文第一次写,求高手提提意见.It has been said,"Not everything tha
高手帮我看一下托福作文
第一次写,求高手提提意见.
It has been said,"Not everything that is learned is contained in books."Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books.In your opinion,which source is more important?Why?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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After acquired the skill of reading and writing,one get the access to knowledge from books as well as from experience.Generally,those skills considered as basic come from experience,like:walking,speaking,driving,etc .And books offer knowledge at a higher level,such as math and literature.Never can one say either of the both sources is not necessary,actually,each side holds advantages of its own.
Book,which is called “teacher and friend of people”,has been instructing human beings for thousands of years,and there is no signal indicates this will stop in the conceivable future.An outstanding factor of book is,the knowledge contained in it,tends to be precise and objective.Usually,no mistake can ever be found in books.This is because,what is written in books is the combination of different experience,among which the responsible writer delete the faults and maintain the truth.Thus,you have little chance to go totally wrong under the insruction of books.Moreover,since books provide system knowledge,it is possible for one to become expert in a new domain with books.For instance,there’re books teach you to become an excellent cook,an outstanding manager,or a famous actress.
In comparing with books,experience also has its own preponderance.Knowledge from experience updates much more frequent than those in books.With today’s fast tempo of life,some knowledge on paper soon convert into old-fashioned.Since people contact with the society around them everyday,however,knowledge from experience never meet such problem,the new knowledge soon replace the old one.
Despite the weakness books may have,as a student majored in Physics,I would say that it is more important a source of knoeledge than experience,for the reason that it is sophiscated and with precision.And that’s what I need in my future work.
首先感谢bangbang-nova详尽的解答。还有一点小问题,首先你说的第二条,我并不是要用从句,那个this是指代上文的;还有就是specific details的问题,在不用例子的情况下,到底如何才算做到了这点?
靠不dd的扫叶闲人1年前1
whitney_027 共回答了16个问题 | 采纳率81.3%
1.one get-> one gets
2.there is no signal indicates this ->indicates that
3.An outstanding factor of book is,the knowledge contained in it,tends to be precise and objective.这句话我不建议你这么写,灵活的插入有必要,但是你有些舍本求末了
4.书面文不要用缩写
5.there’re books teach you to become an excellent cook,an outstanding manager,or a famous actress.-》there are books that teacher
6.covert-》coverts never meet -》never meets replace-》replaces
总的来说,文章还可以,但是得高分很难,小错太多,我没细看,这种单复数错误过多还是有一定影响的.你喜欢用长句,用各种短语搭配,但是我个人感觉句法不够熟练.英语不是中文,英语一句话就是一个意思,你用了太多的逗号,这并不符合英语的写作规范.此外,TOEFL作文最讲究的是用specific details支持你的论点,我感觉你的陈述过多,但是细节没有进行必要的放大.最后就是意义了,你认为光看书就能be an excellent cook.不敢苟同,我倒觉得这些地方时experience 更重要
以上,
补充:我不是让你用从句,你一句话里面两个谓语动词了,indicate stop中间必须得有东西连接
此外,我不认为不用例子可以写好托福作文,托福作文不像GRE,文章体裁都比较大众,很难说理说的出彩,一定要有论据支持.至少我不会也没见过不用specific details得高分的文章.
一道托福作文机经同不同意colleges or universities should offer students a
一道托福作文机经
同不同意colleges or universities should offer students a better job preparation before they can start working.要观点加例子!
zhaoashui1年前1
vbnywta 共回答了14个问题 | 采纳率85.7%
1, From student's perspective, It is obvious that after graduation, the teenagers need to find the job to support their life, so their target in the university is learning practical knowledge,which me...
求托福作文 it is more important for students to understand ideas
求托福作文 it is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts than it is for them t
坐等,300字左右,感激不尽!
is more important for students to understand ideas and concepts than it is for them to learn facts,急阿。就要考。300字,好的话有追加
gao hong1年前1
2793939 共回答了14个问题 | 采纳率92.9%
呵呵呵我在加拿大上学,考托福之前刚好练过这篇呢.我的老师是加拿大人,她说这篇写的非常优秀.我的托福成绩是109,虽然不高,可是这篇真的是很不错.
正文:
It is,as numerous students internalize,really difficult to perform a balancing act on 2 parts of a learning process according to importance.Leaving out their respective benefits,however,students should invariably come to the realization that it is learning the facts that facilitates the absorbance of concepts and enriches the ideas.
Firstly,learning the facts promotes the efficiency in studying the concepts.Recent criticisms have drastically reprimanded the school systems for being "Ivory towers",where concepts are divorced from the practical applications.In order to inverse such negative perceptions,now we are assigned to projects to embark on which involve a considerable amount of research so as to integrate ideas with facts when a new concept is being demonstrated.For example,during the research essay that was concentrated on government intervention with regard to the great depression in Canada,never ever had I authentically understood how this administration benefited people until I learned about the fact that relief policy had been enforced to remove the burden of their financial bankruptcies.Consequently I succeeded in boosting my efficiency of absorbing a certain idea by making reference to a historical event.
Moreover,studying the facts can be beneficial to deepening the concepts.How can we achieve excellence in internalizing a certain idea without applying it to the contemporary or primordial state that is the most imperative?In a word,fact is like a vehicle which we should employ to unravel all the relevantly corresponding scenarios.For example,if I were to present the class with a speech featuring the "chicken or the egg" dilemma by arguing the former comes the first,I would eventually need to put my theory in a framework that is constructed with reliable and impeccable evidences; I would go to the library and search for facts that bolsters my idea and can gradually "Hijack" the brains of the audience by leading them to ultimately develop this enriched mindset about the chicken's existence preceding the egg's.
In conclusion,there is no sweeping generalization as to which one is more important,the fact or the idea.No matter which of them outweighs the other,what we should bear in mind is that fact is an indispensable link between unprocessed knowledge and internalization as well as enrichment.
请问您可以帮我改下我的托福作文么?
请问您可以帮我改下我的托福作文么?
我的英语基础很差,..T...看到了您的其他回答觉得您是很很厉害又很善良很热心的人!..如果您有时间的话请您帮帮我吧!我会很感激很感激您的~
Nowadays,most of us attend college or university for career preparation.However,the acquisitions you might obtain during your college years will not only help you to get an ideal job when you graduate,but also allow you to meet with success in the long run.Such as an effective diploma,companionship with your classmates and professinal knowledge.All of these will keep you being sure of yourself.
First of all,getting an effective diploma can always bring you a well beginning.Because a college diploma is always accepted by employers as proof of competence in a given field.For example,if you held a diploma of a superexcellent college after having learning economic for years,you might easily get employed by a large company in the Wall Street which can provide you much more opportunities to succeed.So you can even simply say that it is a diploma that lead a series of good luck.
Secondly,building steadfast companionship with you college classmates will keep you be sitting pretty in your work.For your classmates,who select the same coure as you,are very likely to be your profession after graduating.For instance,if you became a besinessman,it would be much more easily for you to get investment from one of your classmates who had became an investor of a large company; or if you found a job as a politician,you might be able to persuade another important politician,as your college classmate,to be your political with ease.On the other hand,they can also help you during your hard time.
Finally,learning professional knowledge always make you be competent for your career.whenever you face trouble in your work,professional knowledge can calm you down and help you to solve problem sensibly and effectively.As a professinal technician,for instance,you will be quite equal to the sudden occasion with confidence as you were fully acquainted with the technique needed to overcome the difficulties.This will eventually make you succeed in your career.
Why do you think people attend college or university?
《高分速成》我去的那个书店缺货了..T.T..所以我买了一本《高分作文》,也是新东方的,发现上面全是范文...
关于思路请问可以说得具体一点么?..貌似有点找不到方向..
ym_yxl1年前1
曦西 共回答了22个问题 | 采纳率90.9%
第一 最好能给个题目,因为托福作文即使范文都会有拼写或者语法错误,所以扣题和逻辑是最重要的.
第二,你犯了大部分人都有的错误,就是“you , your”等词,(个人认为这个是大忌)这个是不能用的.考官看了会很迷茫,你整篇都在说“你的”,还有“你”怎么怎么样”.
第三,缺少一个结尾,这个其实如果考试时时间不够都可以不写,但是最好写一下来加强观点等.
the acquisitions you might obtain 、Such as an effective diploma, companionship with your classmates and professinal knowledge. All of these will keep you being sure of yourself这些表达都很奇怪.
推荐你看下新东方的写作速成.那本书精看一下写作挺容易提高的.
写作主要是:1.最重要的逻辑,你用题库来锻炼思路就好了.
2.词汇 这个光背单词绝对没用,就好比你有很多珍珠,但是要用绳子才能穿起来做成项链.所以最好看一下写作词汇,那些都是词组.
3.brainstorm.能很快找到支持自己观点的有力证据.
这个.每句的修改什么的就不说了吧.
你这个题目是题库中的第一道题~
建议你改一下内容.use stronger point to support your essay.
这个问题的写作思路在新东方写作高分速成上也有,建议再练一下思路.
求托福作文书推荐请推荐一本范文书 再推荐一本写作能力提升的书~万分感激还有请问10天搞定TOFEL作文和TOEFL IB
求托福作文书推荐
请推荐一本范文书 再推荐一本写作能力提升的书~万分感激
还有请问10天搞定TOFEL作文和TOEFL IBT高分作文怎么样?
超级评论1年前1
5649484 共回答了15个问题 | 采纳率80%
推荐新托福写作真经,貌似现在出到4了,里面收录的都是近年的新题原题还有范文,摸清出题思路什么的很好的.还有就是真正考试的时候就会发现TPO的题太老了,和现在出的题有的思路都对不上了.
还有就是平时写作的话可以练练TPO小站机经什么的,并不一定是要自己的那场考试,但是题目都是新题,增长能力
托福作文页面有记录字数的工具吗?如果没有怎么纪字数
争鸣1年前0
共回答了个问题 | 采纳率
好心人帮我改改托福作文崇拜的演员或运动员,WHY?It is universally acknowledged that
好心人帮我改改托福作文
崇拜的演员或运动员,WHY?
It is universally acknowledged that famous persons have a great influence on today's life.All things about them such as "what are they doing now","what will they do in the future",ect,are concerned by people.Why?Just because of their excellent character loved and respected deeply by people.If I had a chance to meet a famous person,there is no deny that I would choose Jacky chen who is hard-working,obliging and what's more he brings China to the world.
First of all,when it comes to an excellent character of Jacky chen--hard-working,we can not emphasize the importance of that too much to his success.His success which is not by lucky like some other enterainers is owing to his consistent endeavour and that is the most important character which I admire.Once he acted as a dead man at the beginning of his career,and the director asked him to lie on the ground without moving.The ground was cold and his body was numb,but he did not give
up and sticked to the task until it was finished.Eventually,his excellent performance leads to his success.
Additional,successful as Jacky chen is,he never forgets to help others.We could find his shadow from lots of charities,as an example of his kindness one must only look at his recent efforts in China to help raise money for SARS research,and he was almost the first entertainer who standed out to do some charities for SARS.Also,After the earthquake in Si chuan province in China,he sent his donation of large amount money to the area and did lots of performance for free in order to let more people pay attention to the area.
What's more,Jacky chen is not only known by Chinese but also known by world,nothing is more important than to bring China to the world in his career.He began to go into Hollywood and did a good job like what he had done in China.Many of his movies are popular worldwide,such as RUSH TIME,WHO AM I,ect.His movies let more people know him as well as China.
YI1311年前1
冰雪难融天 共回答了14个问题 | 采纳率92.9%
我看了看,说实在的,咱俩英语水平差不多,要是让我写也应该和你差不多,
从你的文章里可以看出来,你应该是上过补习班的吧.
我这里谈不上什么帮你改,只是和你探讨一下.
结构上,我觉得你最好加一个结尾,做一个综述,也就是all in all ,in conclusion什么的,用来再次强化主旨
还有,我建议你在可行的时间内尽量多打些字,虽然字数多分不一定高,但是,好像老外喜欢字数多的文章.
还有一点,就是最好能过多样化,灵活化你的词汇,好像你用的都是高中词汇,
试着用同义词替换一下出现过多的词汇.
希望对你有帮助
给下托福作文的思路啊,要有例子啊,英文的
给下托福作文的思路啊,要有例子啊,英文的
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
The advertising is the main cause of unhealthy eating habits
霄诺1年前1
yzh77 共回答了20个问题 | 采纳率85%
Here is my recommendations of the main points of this satement.
I disagree this statement for the following three main reasons.
First of all,unheathly eating habits,like all the other habits,takes time to form,and it starts from inside,not outside.For example,getting up late,may starts from the late internet surfing last night,and occassionally it may not be noticeable,however,if you do is again and again,you have formed a bad habit of sleeping late and getting up late,it is originated from the lack of self-control and it is a problem from inside.
Secondly,advertising only offers you excuses for unhealthy eating habits.However,we all know if you are serious about the problem,you will take responsiblity rather than pointing the finger to something else and trying to find excues by blaming other things,such as advertising.
Thirdly,If you have a good eating habit,advertising may do nothing to influence it.As you have experienced the profits brought in by good eating habiits.Advertising can really fool you at all.
Hope this helps.
求批改托福作文,一战21分,这次改进写作方式,求大神给个分数,和评价!
求批改托福作文,一战21分,这次改进写作方式,求大神给个分数,和评价!
Independent Writing:Do you agree with the viewpoint that people are now easier to become educated than in the past?
In modern society,education,as a basic and a crucial mean to improve oneself,has become one essential part of people's life.Its significance is widely accepted by the public,a growing ratio of literate citizens indicates that to become a well educated person is not a dream for ordinary people anymore.Therefore,in my opinion,I definitely agree with the view that it is easier for people to become educated than in the past.
Admittedly,the standard of literate people in the ancient time is much lower than it is today.Taking ancient China for example,people who can recognize and write Chinese characters is thought to be an educated person.However,nowadays even if a person has ability to write wonderful articles and recognize enough Chinese characters,he may not be viewed as a well educated man,since the Information Age requires that human being should not only be master of language skills,but also be well in new technologies,especially for computer science.In this case,it is therefore unfair to conclude that modern people own dominant advantages to become educated than ancient people have.
However,education is only a privilege for the upper class in the ancient time,anyhow.On the contrast,people nowadays are with much more access of acquiring education.One important reason for this change is that emerging of internet; because it provides people an opportunity of getting well-educated in a shorter time and it is with fewer limitations.For instance,people in the past had to spend days in libraries when they were trying to search for some relative information about certain subject and valuable resources are even not open to the public.However,as a almost every family own a computer now,people could save much time on searching information with the help of information on the internet.
Furthermore,considering that people nowadays are under overwhelming pressure from increasing number of competitors resulting from the world population crisis,they will be more motivated in the process of knowledge.Using my brother's experience to demonstrate this view,my brother is a high school student who has a big college entrance examination waiting for him.In order to excel in the exam,he has been working hard for more than two years.In fact,ever since he entered high school,he has never taken part in any form of entertainment to ensure his study time.As a result,my brother was forced to absorb knowledge in many fields,which is impossible for ancient people.
In summary,I definitely to be in favor of the statement that people living in the modern society exceed in the ways they would gains knowledge.This improvement is attributed to stronger motivation of gaining knowledge and the easier access of acquiring knowledge through internet,thus,the Information Age makes education different.
凤梨咖啡1年前1
初初的流沙 共回答了21个问题 | 采纳率90.5%
1.建议你一段一个中心句,中心句放在段首,这样比较明了简洁易懂.
2.你最好还是三个论点都从正面的角度讲,你的第一个admittedly那一段真的可以去掉,改成另外一个正面的讨论段落.
3.最后一段这句In fact,ever since he entered high school,he has never taken part in any form of entertainment to ensure his study time.As a result,my brother was forced to absorb knowledge in many fields,which is impossible for ancient people.
这句话逻辑有点问题,他有没有参加娱乐活动其实和他能不能获取很多知识没有必然联系.有很多牛叉的人是自己又有知识,又有entertainment的.反之,有些屌丝木有entertainment也啥都不会.
个人觉得25左右吧.还是多写写吧,有空没空找点topic,分析几个围绕着topic的论点.
and good luck
托福作文求批改独立写作:do you agree or disagree with the following stat
托福作文求批改
独立写作:do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
Parents should allow children to make mistakes and let them learn from them.
我的作文:
Parents’ education has always been
an important part I children’s growth.It is understandable that parents want
their children to enrich their knowledge.Accordingly,some people hold the
view that parents should allow their children to make mistakes and let them to
learn from the experience.From my point of view,I disagree.
Admittedly,mistakes enables
children to discern what's correct and what's wrong,thus they can know how to
address the same problem next time.It is no hard job to imagine that a child
who touched the boiling water will no longer do the same thing again.The undesirable
results can impress children a lot,so they get impressive experience from
mistakes.However,it is not the case in reality.
For one thing,some mistakes could
be too serious to make up.Consider taking drugs.A child may be curious about them
and take them for fun.It is too late to correct the mistake once it happens.What
we only get is regret,and drawing experience from this will make no sense.Consider
suicide.A child who feels confused about his future may choose committing
suicide to put himself to an end.Consider theft.A child steals without
prevention from parents will eventually be caught and confront sanction.Tragedy
happens from time to time if parents allow their children to make mistakes no
matter what they are.
For another thing,there are
better ways for parents to help their children draw experience.They can take
themselves as examples.Telling their mistakes when they were youngsters to their
children not only gives the children a chance of learning and avoiding making
the same mistake again,but also promotes the relationship between parents and
children.Besides,children can watch educational and informative TV programs.By
watching Laws Online,children will get to know the consequence of criminals
and try to obey laws.By watching Tactics in Work,children will have a closer
look at how to study efficiently and get useful information as much as possible.
By watching Lives of Celebrities,children will be better informed about how to
lead a meaningful life and make contribution to the society.
All in all,taking the vast
disadvantage into account,by no means should parents allow their children to
make mistakes to learn.After all,there are always better approaches for
success.
liu19851231年前2
jinju_zhai 共回答了22个问题 | 采纳率95.5%
模板化太严重,解释说明不够具体,感觉只有一个框架在支撑.所以你需要做的是,丰富文章内容,让文章活起来.如果觉得我的建议可能能帮到你,邮件交流.yuxdong@indiana.edu
托福作文要写多少字才能拿高分?大家帮忙看看这篇托福文章,大概能得多少分?如何改进,希望具体些,
托福作文要写多少字才能拿高分?大家帮忙看看这篇托福文章,大概能得多少分?如何改进,希望具体些,
Currently,more and morestudents choose to take a part-time job for being more independent,which means financial independent and individual independent.However,there still exists the opinion that it is a waste of time for student to do so as their major task is to improve their studies.For my part,it can be a wise choice for parents to encourage their children to take a part-time job.
It is a heat topic that reflect current situation ---e.s,when students graduate from university,they find very difficult to seek a satisfied job as they are regarded as inexperienced and spoiled persons.Nevertheless,if they had taken a part-time before,they can avoid confronting such embarrassing situation.Only with work experience can students be aware of how to build up their own pocket and learn to arrange their own finance well,as I noted before,to be financial independent.Meanwhile,they can also release the financial burden of their parents,and gain work experiences which are taken seriously by employers.
rr吃冬爪1年前2
qojn 共回答了16个问题 | 采纳率93.8%
上面的回答,观点我基本同意.但是他讲的不是针对你的文章来的.6 or 6.5估计是雅思写作的分数.这是托福的大作文,一篇文章并不决定你的分数.要和综合作文一起看的.写得还行,还有一定的改进空间.具体的语言上,表达还好.大作文一般字数越多分数越高,但是字数也不是绝对的.建议400以上吧.其实文章结构很重要,但是更重要的是你的逻辑.否则模板只是生搬硬套.Good Luck!
托福作文求批改.同不同意-----Your job has more effect on your happiness
托福作文求批改.同不同意-----Your job has more effect on your happiness than your social life?
Happiness is a feeling that can comfort everyone.Some people get happiness from their job,and others get it in their social life.I think it is our jobs that has more effect on our happiness than our social life.
First and foremost,most people regard the succeed in their job as the most happiness thing in their life.Many successful people are occupied with their business,some of them even do not have social life.Do they get happiness?Of course they do.Because what makes them feel happiness is that their business can become good.My father is a salesman,everyday he attaches his attention to how can he sell more clothes.I remember last year he sold ten thousand piece of clothes,and he was so happy.Even though he was so tired last year,as he did not have social life ,he still felt happiness.Because he succeed in his career.
In addition,we spend most of the time in our job.We have to work from Monday to Friday.We do not have much time to enjoy our social life.So most of us will get the happiness when we are working.Both our co-workers and our bosses will bring us happiness.I want to take myself as an example.I am a strange girl that I really want to spend all of my time in my office,as a result that my co-workers are so fun that they always make me laugh.Everyday they sing songs and tell jokes in the office when we do not have much work to do.It makes me feel that we are in a big family.
Admittedly,social life is essential in our daily life.When we go hiking or shopping with friends,we will feel so happy.However,our job has more effect as a result that it brings us satisfaction and we spend most of our time on it,which makes us feel more happiness than our social life.
ewtqwefdsa1年前2
nibty 共回答了20个问题 | 采纳率90%
第一行 some...,while others...
most people regard the success...
句子和句子之间要用句号,或者连接词,注意语法
例子还要再展开具体一点
不要重复用某些词,像happiness,换词
句式要多样一点
新托福和老托福作文题库一样么?
qqhhyy1年前2
白菜0606 共回答了20个问题 | 采纳率95%
是一样的 但新托福明确要求300字以上
新写了一盘托福作文,恳求各位帮忙看看哪里有语法错误!
新写了一盘托福作文,恳求各位帮忙看看哪里有语法错误!
As we all know,professional athletes nowadays are commonly receiving decent salaries which are greatly higher than average earnings.However,whether those athletes really deserve such a good pay,the answer of many people may be negative,because they believe that athlete is just a normal occupation and it is unfair to other people if athlete’s salary is so much higher than average.But to be frank,I actually believe that professional athletes indeed deserve the salaries that they are paid.I would like to present the following two points to support my belief.
First of all,it takes more time of training to become a professional athlete than other occupation needs.For example,it usually needs more than ten years of basketball practicing and great talent to become a basketball player in NBA; furthermore,it would take even more effort to become a sports star such as Michael Jordan and David Beckham.Besides,athletes also withstand greater pressure than normal people; they have to contribute almost all their time to training in order to win the game.If they can’t help their team win the contest any more,they would be fired ruthlessly no matter how glorious their past was.
Secondly,the length of most athletes’ career is quite short.They have to retire at a relatively young age no matter how hard they have been working.On the other hand,most people in other careers can work almost as long as they want and earn more money as they get older,such as lawyers and doctors.But when it comes to athletes,this simply isn’t the case.Therefore,if athletes can’t have high salaries,I guess no one would be willing to become one of them.
In conclusion,although it seems that professional athletes have earned more money than we expect,given the factors I have just outlined,I can only say that those athletes deserve what they have,indeed.
sundayuan1年前1
sweet19850920 共回答了12个问题 | 采纳率75%
第二段应改为 First of all,it takes more time in training to become a professional athlete than other occupational needs.For example,it usually needs more than ten years of basketball practicing and great talent to become a basketball player in the NBA; furthermore,it would take even more effort to become a sports star such as Michael Jordan and David Beckham
帮忙修改托福作文!题目是 多读books about real events 还是novels
帮忙修改托福作文!题目是 多读books about real events 还是novels
As an indispensable part of life, books of all kinds bring many benefits, some people find novels more interesting and enjoyable. However, books of real events influence people in a more essential way.
First, reading books about real events can better people's decision-making skill. When in a dilemma, people can analyse both the good and the bad effects through the true stories of other people from the history books. Since they can think considerately as well as wisely, they will always make the best choice. For instance, if you are struggling whether to tell a lie to protest yourself or to tell the truth even though get punishment. Considering the folklore of George Washington and the cherry tree. I'm sure it will inspire you on what to do.
Second, reading books about real events are shortcuts to success. Life is limited. We can not try everything and learn from our fallings. So why don’t we learn about others’ experiences and make the right choices. It will certainly pave our way to success while avoid much unessassary mistakes.
Adimittedly, reading novels is a more relaxing and interesting thing to do, especially in nowadys—an ever-increasing pressure society. It certainly is a good way to escape from the heavy study and endless work, we get good relaxation from it. However, we can not learn as much as from the books about real events.
To sum up, reading books about real is more significant, for we can make better decision and get to success easily.
firefox20021年前1
terisa0310 共回答了18个问题 | 采纳率83.3%
can better people's decision-making skill这一句应该改成can help people make better decision
When in a dilemma,a应该删去
protest yourself 应该成protect yourself
get to success easily.应该成get to succeed easily
关于GRE作文和托福作文我考过GRE的AW,现在在准备托福考试.我记得之前好像听说托福作文不能按GRE作文那样写.是这样
关于GRE作文和托福作文
我考过GRE的AW,现在在准备托福考试.
我记得之前好像听说托福作文不能按GRE作文那样写.是这样么?
我现在的托福作文思路完全就是按照GRE的思路那样顺下来,如果这样写托福作文会有问题么?
52tianfu1年前1
江一舟 共回答了24个问题 | 采纳率91.7%
托福作文相对来说有很强的规律性,可以记下来一些考试模板,到时候到考场上就不会紧张了.